All Comments on 'Rotten Apple'

A very good story for a first attempt. It could have beel fleshed out a bit more, but it was good. I look forward to either seeing this one added to or other different stories shared. Keep it up.

I want more (:

You should've done a couple of stories beforehand that lead up to the sex. Other than that great job :)

Your story has some nice potential and it could be even hotter if you addressed the language and spelling errors. Keep in mind that something like that can really break the flow of a story for a reader, ruining the mood. So maybe consider getting help from the editors available on this site before publishing future stories? Also, you could easily work in a bit more character building and dialogue with secondary characters to make the story richer and to increase the tension more. Just something to consider :) keep writing though!