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SweetOblivionSweetOblivionabout 11 years ago

Milk White thighs and aromatic juices aside this is a competent love poem, with good scansion; but you don't really say anything different. Try to refocus and make the experience special to you and consequently special to your readers. S.O.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
"the gentle breeze "

is not enought

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