All Comments on 'The After Dance'

Loved the long drawn out tease!

Nice abrupt finish too.

If you love sexy lingerie, tormenting tease, being tantalisingly fed grapes of pleasure one by and with a sensual erotic happy ending to relieve the agonising ache, then this if for you! Brilliant. All I can say there’s some lucky guy out there

Loved it, you need to write more.

If you enjoy reading my story (notice lack of spelling errors) then make a comment.

Otherwise, I won't write anymore stories for Literotica.

Tell me how many times you read this story and how many times you came...so far.

What would you like to read about?

Tell me all. Meow.

A joy to read

Thank you

Must fix spelling errors. The first blatant one is the use of 'conscience' instead of the

intended 'conscious'. It is used twice toward the beginning of the piece and sets a

precedent for the reader to prepare for more errors. Amend, delete and revise.

I'd shave a bit off of the food, i.e. soy milk, dairy allergy and that he uses whipped

cream and you sugar. There are others small changes I could mention but my eyes

won't stay open...very sleepy. If it helps, I am an editor so am fairly skilled at assisting writers. Feel free to email me: ckruggel@yahoo.com if you'd like any more

of my humble suggestions. Sincerely, Christine (xvideos 'MsFit')

Far fewer spelling mistakes than usually.

I like the details.

I'd read it more than once.

After a good orgasm, I go to sleep too. 😍

From englishforums.com

Marius Hancu: "off of" is much inferior to off without the preposition (8 Oct 2006)

Clive: I consider it a sign of careless speech and possibly of a poor education. ( 8 Oct 2006)

Christine, best you continue working at xvideos...instead of trolling for editing jobs here...and I'm certain you can find far more errors in your own life to repair...get on with that project dear!