If you write in Word and use spelling and grammar check, it would catch many of those errors. You did a common spelling error when they had "desert" (an arid type of geography, when you meant (I'm sure) dessert (a treat after a meal).
Not to be too critical but it detracts from you story.
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Anonymous04/19/13
Belongs in Romance
not LW. Very good description of her capacity to be a slut though.
English
Good Story
I enjoyed reading this little tale.
Spelling and grammar
This is a nice little story.
If you write in Word and use spelling and grammar check, it would catch many of those errors. You did a common spelling error when they had "desert" (an arid type of geography, when you meant (I'm sure) dessert (a treat after a meal).
Not to be too critical but it detracts from you story.
Best regards,
Belongs in Romance
not LW. Very good description of her capacity to be a slut though.
Romance
TLW is not THAT adventuresome. It is sweet and hot.
Interesting that she gets 'desert' but when he returns the favor, it becomes 'dessert!' Maybe kinda like 'fiancé' and 'fiancée'? Maybe not!
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