All Comments on 'Across The River'

That was just waaay tooo short. I can't give any kind of an opinion on it. I love this site but please people stop putting all these ridiculously short chapters up here. And I don't know about anybody else but when I read a book I like to read it from beginning to end without all these long breaks in between. Either post longer chapters, more than one chapter at a time or just wait until you finish the story then post it.

Yes it was short, I guess it was intended to be short - and complete! There is no indication that this piece was to be the opening chapter of a series or anything but a piece complete in itself, and a neat one at that. Anon, please post your comments where they are relevant.

There is an alternative answer to your complaint. Just wait until all parts are posted and then read them in one go - problem solved without whinging.

It says "Chapter 1: The River", so it's quite obviously not a complete story. It does show promise of being a good one, however.

On the fence with this one. It has potential to be a good story if there will be more chapters.

I feel like someone is going to find her floating and maybe save her from the terrible family she has. Can't wait to read the next chapter!

like to hear more of Nyla and her family and how things change.

I really REALLY would like to see where this goes. keep it up.

The story has just begun and I hate Nyla's human incubator, incubators husband and his devil spawn. I do hope that she will rescued and the man who rescues her is fine as hell. Please save her from drowning and her incubator and her new family.

hope you update soon. great start!

please, please update this amazing story....great beginning

Beautiful story, love the characters, the theme, the setting, the now deceased head strong Nyla. Lovely story, thanks.