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seriously?
This.sucked
Be constructive, please...
Anyone dumb enough to say something stupid like "this sucked" and not specify a reason they didn't like it needs to grow a brain that works. No wonder you hid behind a cloak of anonymity. How is the author supposed to improve their writing if you don't say what it is you disliked about the story?
Personally, I thought it was well-written. I give it a 4. I would have given it a 5 if it were longer.
Longer, eh?
To "Be Constructive" guy/gal: Thanks for the advice. I've been called out before for having too much background, so i guess i need to find a happy medium. And I agree with you that the first person is probably a troll.
First femdom effort
I would like to see another chapter. I think you could have put more in to this one, but you seem to be testing the waters of femdom fiction.
Another chapter?
I could do that. It'll take a few days to be written and posted...
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