I've enjoyed your other works, but the flow felt jerky and off-pace several times and made it difficult to get into the story or characters.
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Anonymous04/24/13
usually don't like the husband as cheater stories
yes silly, I know, but there it is. I did like this one, however. Probably the strength of your writing, but also a good job of portraying two strong characters. (In hubby's case, not strong IN character, rather a strongly written character) Anyway, simply: a good job, fine effort, and I thankyou for this one. I guess I needed a change of pace from the cheating wife. Sure, wifey #2 was the consumate cheater, but she was such a minor character here, that it really didn't matter. Actually, that had been the only weakness of this story. She was little more than a plot device, or obstacle in the way. You gave us only one brief passage to show her mind, and it wasn't enough. Never-the-less, more may have been overkill, if you only needed her to be a stereotype. Finally, it didn't take away much from a very readable, and enjoyable story. Thanks again!
not a cheater fan and btb is more my style but this one was pretty good. hey, maybe im a fucking sexist.
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Anonymous04/24/13
Actually liked it a lot.
Hopefully he can keep it in his pants.
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Anonymous04/24/13
Interesting story.
The premise was good and the ending was believable. She hates him and loves him but time heals all wounds. Well, except in Literotica stories. People seem to enjoy grudges and vengeance and general suffering.
In any event, this could be the story of my life. And now we are going on 10 years.
I have seen too many men make this same mistake. Unfortunately, they do not usually get the second chance and everyone suffers for it. When women cheat, they usually want out of the marriage, and the husband usually cannot accept his wife cheating. Probably because she is the one that actually has the kids and the only one who really knows who the father is. It is just the way we are wired.
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Anonymous04/24/13
Apples are not oranges
This story was a miserable failure. What a savage bitch that Olivia is! Men are expected and allowed to cheat on thier wives. It is standard in all cultures except the U.S. for men to have mistresses. Even the Bible sanctions it. The cheating wife is what is evil. She is the harlot that should be burned at the stake. Even if Olivia didn't cheat, she will. Poor Ben is now a wimp of the worst kind. Very bad story.
Pretty well written and amusing enough in parts to make it flow well. Can't say I agree with the last commenter but.... Good dialogue and I thought Olivai ws a hoot. Way to go.
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Anonymous04/24/13
lucky
"apples and oranges" pretty much completely sums up the btb crowd so ill second what he said only I'm doing it sarcastically with knowledge of how mysoginistic and fucking stupid that line of thought is.
Unfortunately, this "I'll make him pay" mindset is very common. He would be better just leaving. Yes, he loves her, he hurt her, and she will make him pay. BUT, nobody can pay and keep paying forever, without hope of ever discharging the debt. After a while, her hate will burn all his love, never mind how great the sex and the memories are, and he will leave again.
It's better to be single and alone than married and lonely.
Pay no attention to anonymous below; not only is this person afraid to put their handle on their comment so we could review their stories and compare, but anonymous cannot write a coherent critique with any value to you.
The ending was somewhat rushed, and a few hundred more words describing the kiss and the couples reunion in the car would have closed the piece a little better. Expounding on his, and her, inner thoughts and how they felt emotionally as she gave him what he wanted, the kiss, would have been a perfect lead in to a future chapter that would include the erotic make up session that would surely come that evening taking delight in her warm and soft body.
It’s my opinion that you have a very natural talent for writing not only erotica, but probably on any subject. I enjoyed the story very much and liked your development of Olivia. Your flow was good so why not develop the other characters just a bit more to enhance the full picture.
In all, well done, and don’t let the anonymous trolls, with nothing useful to say, stunt your growth as a writer. I’ll be reading your other stories as time permits.
But the sudden reversal by the wife, her change is not fully substantiated, a bit mystifying. She's going to fuck him over every which way then she is taking jim back because he suggests he is going to off himself, i get it but you erote her with so much anger, is she bipolar?
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Anonymous04/24/13
No wonder he cheated on her in the first place. I hate cheaters but lord have mercy she might have been the biggest bitch in history. She blames it all on him which he is definitely to blame, but maybe she should stop and think about her toxic attitude. That kind of thing doesn't just happen because someone cheated. She was a shitty person so it was hard to feel sympathy for someone like that.
Talk about a jumbled piece of crap! As an author, it is YOUR job to paint a picture that the reader - your audience - can take in and become a part of. You failed, utterly.
If she hates him, then let her hate him. If she loves him but is conflicted, then put some freaking effort into actually **portraying** her plight. But this going back and forth just makes it that much less likely that I'm going to waste any time reading more of your work.
Sorry, but you'll have to get MUCH better before I invest any more time in your writings.
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Anonymous04/24/13
well done
I liked how you portrayed the duality of each persons feeling. No one feels cut and dry about such complicated matters. We all vacillate between how we thinks we should react and how we truly feel. *****
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Anonymous04/24/13
And this is why I dislike cheating husband stories.
The fucking prick always gets away with it, no matter how little he deserves it. Any woman in his place would/should have been tarred and fathered in timeless BTB style. This prick on the other hand, cheats on his wife, marries the whore he cheated with, then when the whore (shocker!) cheats on him, he wants his ex-wife back.
Of course, that's not enough. He spies on his ex-wife, making sure she's chaste for him DESPITE THE FACT THEY"RE NOT MARRIED, not having any other men like that darn old supervisor. He uses his children as a weapon against his wife, lying to them and telling them that she agreed to something she explicitly did not just so that he could get away with something she didn't want.
BTB works both ways. Burn the Bitch. Burn the Bastard. Chrissakes, waiting for that one story where people STOP MAKING EXCUSES FOR FUCKING CHEATING HUSBANDS. I mean look at some of the comments in here - despite the fact that the husband acknowledges he was SOLELY in the wrong despite, they still insist it must have been at least partly at fault.
Would they do that if the position were reversed? If Abby the whore had been the original wife, would they have smiled and said, that woman is a cheater sure, but he's PARTLY at fault even if he looks perfect. No. Fucking honorless, hypocritical mysogynists.
Wedding vows are a two-way street.
Three stores for taking what was turning into an awesome reverse-BTB story and making it into the same lousy cuck-wife crap we always see in the rare stories on her where the husband cheats. The dude was guilty as sin; why was he rewarded?
Abby is a fairly important loose end. He has no evidence, so, unless he has a great pre-nup agreement, she will rake him over the financial coals.
Glad Sweetie finally got enough of her game together. I would have thought Grandmom would have worked on her daughter during the rehab week. That week seems to have been a complete waste. Only possible benefit was that it so thoroughly demoralized Hubby that he acknowledged complete surrender, rarely a good thing in the long run! Maybe since that broke the ice, it will not be terrible in this case!
5*
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Anonymous04/25/13
Wow a wife taking a cheater back
How come no burn the male bitch comments. Does it only apply to females.
Unpolished, and without a signature moment. I appreciated the originality in this version of a LW story. The initial set-up was interesting. I appreciated the conflicting emotions the ex, Olivia, had vis a vis her ex-husband. However, it was handled with all the subtlety of a sledgehammer. Seriously, the wife's reactions in from one moment to the next when dealing with the ex-hubby made me thing she was both bi-polar and schizophrenic.
I think it was fitting, at some level, that the story was somewhat muddled and the plot rather herky-jerky. After all, there was a lot of mess and chaos in the aftermath of the infidelity and the divorce, and so this story captured that tone.
The new wife was an afterthought, and absurdly evil. They had been married less than a year, she basically told him she was cheating on him, why bother with a P.I.? Except as a device to get him to talk to the ex-wife, I guess....
4 stars.
Was hoping for a ch 2 but things came to a crashing - yet satisfying conclusion. Especially loved the more realistic view of a real relationship with true to life humans with human emotions.
Okay he was a cheating ass. Did you have to make her such a bitch? I simply don't see how, after a year, she had such vitriol left and then suddenly ready to take him in and start making babies while he's still married to someone else. Too much Cinderella "happily ever after" for my taste.
But impossible. Consequences are a bitch. He was a cheating jerkoff asshole who married the whore he was screwing. What did he expect, her to be faithful? He blew a good thing with the love of his life and made vows with a slut who fucked for fun and needed a patsy for appearances. I don't have a double standard. I hate all cheaters. All should suffer in pain. Like Oscar.
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Anonymous04/25/13
Oddly interesting LW story
4.6 or so... very good.
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Anonymous04/25/13
Hurried a bit, but Good!
A good storyline. DG Hear wrote some like this. Really very rare here.
Why so? that brings us to the comment 'Apples are not oranges' and relentless cbml crowd(bored of calling BTB. Anyway, cantby.. leads the pack by relentlessly leaving comments, a lot.) Wife, Olivia, is a good characterization. He's lucky. God bless Humanity!
Beautifully quirky story. Two things though, keep writing and write another soon
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Anonymous04/25/13
Ben was stupid!
He doesn't deserve her back but the children are in need. He'd better spend the rest of his life proving that he was worthy of a second chance.
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Anonymous04/25/13
Difficult to enjoy
To boil it down, he's a cheater, and a weak and shallow man. She's a wounded and vindictive woman, and addicted to being a victim. I don't want to be anywhere close to either of them.
I can't tell what you were trying to accomplish with this story.
If you were trying to highlight the way that a put-upon spouse often has conflicting emotions, I don't think you were successful. Olivia comes across as being only a RCH short of batshit crazy. Had I been Ben's friend I would have told him to run, not walk, in the opposite direction as fast as possible.
This was an absorbing read, by & large. The kiss-off scene with Abby ideally should have been inserted for a bit more tang. Basically the husband surrendered unconditionally. Ouch ! An idea of why he strayed in first place would have been enlightening. Abby existed only as a caricature, a straw dog seductress.
In terms of the long term outlook, counseling is needed. Those spasms of anger Olivia is subject to just barely skirt the edges of sanity. She periodically seems this close to Lorena Bobbit-ing the dumb bastard. That being said, the kids have their parents back together, that's not the answer but it's the start of the answer.
They MUST find a way to confine the domestic drama to DVD player & big screen TV. This story is a uncompleted mosaic , but worthy of completion. ****
If this was meant as a weak parody of " Loving Wives" stories then it was decent.If this was supposed to be taken seriously, it flopped.
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Anonymous04/25/13
Hi cantbuymy!
I wrote that comment; on a lighter note. Any LW stories, even the sick ones, sometimes you're tricked into reading one, you are one of the early ones to write comments. I read your stories and liked them; some! A lot of anger. Anyway, didn't mean to hurt. Sorry, if you are.
Hey india, no you don't hurt my feelings. i write to get people to feel emotions and rarely feel bad if they dont like them. only two stories pull my own emotions, "Feeding the ducks" and "second chances" and both have nothing to really do with revenge just love, but "second chances" is very dark.
as an aside i am going to do a forgiveness story with a cheating wife, but damn if it isn't difficult. JPB is probably the best when it comes to switching back and forth between BTB and not. but no one is in his class.
shoot me an e-mail, no need to put a return e-mail on it, let me know your thoughts. a few people think they have to put in an e-mail address but it is not necessary.
Seems to me that hubby paid his dues. I think the Olivia character was portrayed quite well - the opposite of love is apathy not hate and she was still angry but did figure it out when she realized he'd given up. Entertaining and interesting story.
This is a rare story where the husband cheats, instead of the wife.
And boy, is he so ever the bastard. He's despicable. He cheats with a fucking blonde bimbo, later MARRIES the bimbo and is hurt that she's cheating on him! Whoopdedoo.
Some have commented that the ex wife must be bipolar, her feelings and thoughts change so much. I don't think that's the case. She loves him and hates him, that pretty much encapsulates how she feels. She's torn.
It doesn't help AT ALL, that he is practically stalking her, checking up on whether she's going out with other guys, constantly trying to get her to take him back. She's never left alone to really think about it.
Worse, he's using the accident HE caused, AND afterward USING their children, to get back into their house. And it works! She takes him back...
Sorry dude, but cheating husband is a scumbag rivaling any of the evil wives in other stories here.
I can't believe all this crap! I wrote a story about a wife who put her children ahead of her pride and anger. Of course she loved her weak cheating husband. Love doesn't just die. Love isn't rational. Life isn't rational. How many LWs are there where the husband recounts all his fears, all his doubts. Oh was I big enough, handsome enough, nice enough, was I up to the task? Isn't Olivia asking exactly the same questions, but from the woman's perspective. I'm a man, but my wife has delivered six babies all ranging from 5 to 8 pounds. That's a lot of tonnage coming out of the same place I put it in. Of course we know it returns to form, and if it didn't she could squeeze her legs together a little more tightly, or I could put my legs outside hers. Give Olivia her due; she's willing to take her ungrateful shitbird back. Why; because she loves her children, and yes she loves him too. Will she ever forget? Never. Will she throw his conniving ways up to him? Of course! Will he take it? Absolutely! Her asshole husband finally figured which side of the bread had the butter on it. This was a great marriage that floundered and then broke, but Olivia is willing to try again, and her stupid husband is damn glad of it. I have high hopes for these two, and no bullshit. They're my people. I made them up. If I want them to live happily ever after, with the expected reminders from Olivia how he fucked this up once, that's OK!
Honestly, some of you comment writers are stupid assholes. Go back and read my second LW story, the one where the husband hired his brother's motorcyle gang to carry out some of the most despicable deeds imaginable. Didn't any of you get the murderous husband was a school teacher? He could be teaching your children right now! Jesus, the NRA wants to arm guys like him! carvohi
Double standard nonetheless but redemption is always good
The story felt real with a double standard looming it still worked for me. Hey we're all not fit for life's rigors and fall less than acceptable to our own standard let alone our spouse's. Reuniting kids to their parents in earnest is always nice redemption is nice. The author never rationalized the cheating husband's behavior leading to the destruction of his marriage. The author never justified to the reader the reason he should've redeemed or forgiven. The ending was a blitz and it felt very rushed. All in all, it was a nice read.
English
Doesn't flow
I've enjoyed your other works, but the flow felt jerky and off-pace several times and made it difficult to get into the story or characters.
usually don't like the husband as cheater stories
yes silly, I know, but there it is. I did like this one, however. Probably the strength of your writing, but also a good job of portraying two strong characters. (In hubby's case, not strong IN character, rather a strongly written character) Anyway, simply: a good job, fine effort, and I thankyou for this one. I guess I needed a change of pace from the cheating wife. Sure, wifey #2 was the consumate cheater, but she was such a minor character here, that it really didn't matter. Actually, that had been the only weakness of this story. She was little more than a plot device, or obstacle in the way. You gave us only one brief passage to show her mind, and it wasn't enough. Never-the-less, more may have been overkill, if you only needed her to be a stereotype. Finally, it didn't take away much from a very readable, and enjoyable story. Thanks again!
not a cheater fan and btb is more my style but this one was pretty good. hey, maybe im a fucking sexist.
Actually liked it a lot.
Hopefully he can keep it in his pants.
Interesting story.
The premise was good and the ending was believable. She hates him and loves him but time heals all wounds. Well, except in Literotica stories. People seem to enjoy grudges and vengeance and general suffering.
In any event, this could be the story of my life. And now we are going on 10 years.
Sad but true
I have seen too many men make this same mistake. Unfortunately, they do not usually get the second chance and everyone suffers for it. When women cheat, they usually want out of the marriage, and the husband usually cannot accept his wife cheating. Probably because she is the one that actually has the kids and the only one who really knows who the father is. It is just the way we are wired.
Apples are not oranges
This story was a miserable failure. What a savage bitch that Olivia is! Men are expected and allowed to cheat on thier wives. It is standard in all cultures except the U.S. for men to have mistresses. Even the Bible sanctions it. The cheating wife is what is evil. She is the harlot that should be burned at the stake. Even if Olivia didn't cheat, she will. Poor Ben is now a wimp of the worst kind. Very bad story.
I Liked Your Story
Pretty well written and amusing enough in parts to make it flow well. Can't say I agree with the last commenter but.... Good dialogue and I thought Olivai ws a hoot. Way to go.
lucky
"apples and oranges" pretty much completely sums up the btb crowd so ill second what he said only I'm doing it sarcastically with knowledge of how mysoginistic and fucking stupid that line of thought is.
He will hate her
Unfortunately, this "I'll make him pay" mindset is very common. He would be better just leaving. Yes, he loves her, he hurt her, and she will make him pay. BUT, nobody can pay and keep paying forever, without hope of ever discharging the debt. After a while, her hate will burn all his love, never mind how great the sex and the memories are, and he will leave again.
It's better to be single and alone than married and lonely.
Your preface mentioned being pilloried
Pay no attention to anonymous below; not only is this person afraid to put their handle on their comment so we could review their stories and compare, but anonymous cannot write a coherent critique with any value to you.
The ending was somewhat rushed, and a few hundred more words describing the kiss and the couples reunion in the car would have closed the piece a little better. Expounding on his, and her, inner thoughts and how they felt emotionally as she gave him what he wanted, the kiss, would have been a perfect lead in to a future chapter that would include the erotic make up session that would surely come that evening taking delight in her warm and soft body.
It’s my opinion that you have a very natural talent for writing not only erotica, but probably on any subject. I enjoyed the story very much and liked your development of Olivia. Your flow was good so why not develop the other characters just a bit more to enhance the full picture.
In all, well done, and don’t let the anonymous trolls, with nothing useful to say, stunt your growth as a writer. I’ll be reading your other stories as time permits.
Re Anonymous
"Apples and Oranges"
What a dismal wanker this person is!!
this may be the fucking dumbest thing I have ever read
wow this was just sub human. IT is bad it makes me want to re-read every single Matt Moreau story
Ok
But the sudden reversal by the wife, her change is not fully substantiated, a bit mystifying. She's going to fuck him over every which way then she is taking jim back because he suggests he is going to off himself, i get it but you erote her with so much anger, is she bipolar?
No wonder he cheated on her in the first place. I hate cheaters but lord have mercy she might have been the biggest bitch in history. She blames it all on him which he is definitely to blame, but maybe she should stop and think about her toxic attitude. That kind of thing doesn't just happen because someone cheated. She was a shitty person so it was hard to feel sympathy for someone like that.
Ugh.
Talk about a jumbled piece of crap! As an author, it is YOUR job to paint a picture that the reader - your audience - can take in and become a part of. You failed, utterly.
If she hates him, then let her hate him. If she loves him but is conflicted, then put some freaking effort into actually **portraying** her plight. But this going back and forth just makes it that much less likely that I'm going to waste any time reading more of your work.
Sorry, but you'll have to get MUCH better before I invest any more time in your writings.
well done
I liked how you portrayed the duality of each persons feeling. No one feels cut and dry about such complicated matters. We all vacillate between how we thinks we should react and how we truly feel. *****
And this is why I dislike cheating husband stories.
The fucking prick always gets away with it, no matter how little he deserves it. Any woman in his place would/should have been tarred and fathered in timeless BTB style. This prick on the other hand, cheats on his wife, marries the whore he cheated with, then when the whore (shocker!) cheats on him, he wants his ex-wife back.
Of course, that's not enough. He spies on his ex-wife, making sure she's chaste for him DESPITE THE FACT THEY"RE NOT MARRIED, not having any other men like that darn old supervisor. He uses his children as a weapon against his wife, lying to them and telling them that she agreed to something she explicitly did not just so that he could get away with something she didn't want.
BTB works both ways. Burn the Bitch. Burn the Bastard. Chrissakes, waiting for that one story where people STOP MAKING EXCUSES FOR FUCKING CHEATING HUSBANDS. I mean look at some of the comments in here - despite the fact that the husband acknowledges he was SOLELY in the wrong despite, they still insist it must have been at least partly at fault.
Would they do that if the position were reversed? If Abby the whore had been the original wife, would they have smiled and said, that woman is a cheater sure, but he's PARTLY at fault even if he looks perfect. No. Fucking honorless, hypocritical mysogynists.
Wedding vows are a two-way street.
Three stores for taking what was turning into an awesome reverse-BTB story and making it into the same lousy cuck-wife crap we always see in the rare stories on her where the husband cheats. The dude was guilty as sin; why was he rewarded?
What
Im not sure what happened. All over the place
sorry, but...
I fell in love with "the bitch". So full of raw emotion, it made my dick very hard!!
Just a chaotic rambling tale..
Only worth a 1.
Loose ends
Abby is a fairly important loose end. He has no evidence, so, unless he has a great pre-nup agreement, she will rake him over the financial coals.
Glad Sweetie finally got enough of her game together. I would have thought Grandmom would have worked on her daughter during the rehab week. That week seems to have been a complete waste. Only possible benefit was that it so thoroughly demoralized Hubby that he acknowledged complete surrender, rarely a good thing in the long run! Maybe since that broke the ice, it will not be terrible in this case!
5*
Wow a wife taking a cheater back
How come no burn the male bitch comments. Does it only apply to females.
why he sudden switch
got tired of writing and took easy way out?
Seems rough
Unpolished, and without a signature moment. I appreciated the originality in this version of a LW story. The initial set-up was interesting. I appreciated the conflicting emotions the ex, Olivia, had vis a vis her ex-husband. However, it was handled with all the subtlety of a sledgehammer. Seriously, the wife's reactions in from one moment to the next when dealing with the ex-hubby made me thing she was both bi-polar and schizophrenic.
I think it was fitting, at some level, that the story was somewhat muddled and the plot rather herky-jerky. After all, there was a lot of mess and chaos in the aftermath of the infidelity and the divorce, and so this story captured that tone.
The new wife was an afterthought, and absurdly evil. They had been married less than a year, she basically told him she was cheating on him, why bother with a P.I.? Except as a device to get him to talk to the ex-wife, I guess....
4 stars.
loved it!
Was hoping for a ch 2 but things came to a crashing - yet satisfying conclusion. Especially loved the more realistic view of a real relationship with true to life humans with human emotions.
Please keep giving us more gems such as this.
Just didn't make sense to me
Okay he was a cheating ass. Did you have to make her such a bitch? I simply don't see how, after a year, she had such vitriol left and then suddenly ready to take him in and start making babies while he's still married to someone else. Too much Cinderella "happily ever after" for my taste.
Good Tale
But impossible. Consequences are a bitch. He was a cheating jerkoff asshole who married the whore he was screwing. What did he expect, her to be faithful? He blew a good thing with the love of his life and made vows with a slut who fucked for fun and needed a patsy for appearances. I don't have a double standard. I hate all cheaters. All should suffer in pain. Like Oscar.
Oddly interesting LW story
4.6 or so... very good.
Hurried a bit, but Good!
A good storyline. DG Hear wrote some like this. Really very rare here.
Why so? that brings us to the comment 'Apples are not oranges' and relentless cbml crowd(bored of calling BTB. Anyway, cantby.. leads the pack by relentlessly leaving comments, a lot.) Wife, Olivia, is a good characterization. He's lucky. God bless Humanity!
Great Job C
C,
You seem to get it. Great job.
Matt Moreau
Perfection in Print! 5 *
Beautifully quirky story. Two things though, keep writing and write another soon
Ben was stupid!
He doesn't deserve her back but the children are in need. He'd better spend the rest of his life proving that he was worthy of a second chance.
Difficult to enjoy
To boil it down, he's a cheater, and a weak and shallow man. She's a wounded and vindictive woman, and addicted to being a victim. I don't want to be anywhere close to either of them.
That was different
and here different is a good thing. I liked it.
Thanks
I can't tell what you were trying to accomplish with this story.
If you were trying to highlight the way that a put-upon spouse often has conflicting emotions, I don't think you were successful. Olivia comes across as being only a RCH short of batshit crazy. Had I been Ben's friend I would have told him to run, not walk, in the opposite direction as fast as possible.
I cannot score this one highly, I'm afraid.
All 2 Addicted 2 the Drama ?
This was an absorbing read, by & large. The kiss-off scene with Abby ideally should have been inserted for a bit more tang. Basically the husband surrendered unconditionally. Ouch ! An idea of why he strayed in first place would have been enlightening. Abby existed only as a caricature, a straw dog seductress.
In terms of the long term outlook, counseling is needed. Those spasms of anger Olivia is subject to just barely skirt the edges of sanity. She periodically seems this close to Lorena Bobbit-ing the dumb bastard. That being said, the kids have their parents back together, that's not the answer but it's the start of the answer.
They MUST find a way to confine the domestic drama to DVD player & big screen TV. This story is a uncompleted mosaic , but worthy of completion. ****
damn if i dont actually like it; and i fucking hate cheaters.
If this was meant as a weak parody of " Loving Wives" stories then it was decent.If this was supposed to be taken seriously, it flopped.
Hi cantbuymy!
I wrote that comment; on a lighter note. Any LW stories, even the sick ones, sometimes you're tricked into reading one, you are one of the early ones to write comments. I read your stories and liked them; some! A lot of anger. Anyway, didn't mean to hurt. Sorry, if you are.
K,
India.
Hey india, no you don't hurt my feelings. i write to get people to feel emotions and rarely feel bad if they dont like them. only two stories pull my own emotions, "Feeding the ducks" and "second chances" and both have nothing to really do with revenge just love, but "second chances" is very dark.
as an aside i am going to do a forgiveness story with a cheating wife, but damn if it isn't difficult. JPB is probably the best when it comes to switching back and forth between BTB and not. but no one is in his class.
shoot me an e-mail, no need to put a return e-mail on it, let me know your thoughts. a few people think they have to put in an e-mail address but it is not necessary.
I liked this story
Seems to me that hubby paid his dues. I think the Olivia character was portrayed quite well - the opposite of love is apathy not hate and she was still angry but did figure it out when she realized he'd given up. Entertaining and interesting story.
will do, cantbuymy.
Will do.
India.
Loved it
A truly enjoyable read. Thank you very much. I especially loved the ending.
This is a rare story where the husband cheats, instead of the wife.
And boy, is he so ever the bastard. He's despicable. He cheats with a fucking blonde bimbo, later MARRIES the bimbo and is hurt that she's cheating on him! Whoopdedoo.
Some have commented that the ex wife must be bipolar, her feelings and thoughts change so much. I don't think that's the case. She loves him and hates him, that pretty much encapsulates how she feels. She's torn.
It doesn't help AT ALL, that he is practically stalking her, checking up on whether she's going out with other guys, constantly trying to get her to take him back. She's never left alone to really think about it.
Worse, he's using the accident HE caused, AND afterward USING their children, to get back into their house. And it works! She takes him back...
Sorry dude, but cheating husband is a scumbag rivaling any of the evil wives in other stories here.
You didn't get it!
I can't believe all this crap! I wrote a story about a wife who put her children ahead of her pride and anger. Of course she loved her weak cheating husband. Love doesn't just die. Love isn't rational. Life isn't rational. How many LWs are there where the husband recounts all his fears, all his doubts. Oh was I big enough, handsome enough, nice enough, was I up to the task? Isn't Olivia asking exactly the same questions, but from the woman's perspective. I'm a man, but my wife has delivered six babies all ranging from 5 to 8 pounds. That's a lot of tonnage coming out of the same place I put it in. Of course we know it returns to form, and if it didn't she could squeeze her legs together a little more tightly, or I could put my legs outside hers. Give Olivia her due; she's willing to take her ungrateful shitbird back. Why; because she loves her children, and yes she loves him too. Will she ever forget? Never. Will she throw his conniving ways up to him? Of course! Will he take it? Absolutely! Her asshole husband finally figured which side of the bread had the butter on it. This was a great marriage that floundered and then broke, but Olivia is willing to try again, and her stupid husband is damn glad of it. I have high hopes for these two, and no bullshit. They're my people. I made them up. If I want them to live happily ever after, with the expected reminders from Olivia how he fucked this up once, that's OK!
Honestly, some of you comment writers are stupid assholes. Go back and read my second LW story, the one where the husband hired his brother's motorcyle gang to carry out some of the most despicable deeds imaginable. Didn't any of you get the murderous husband was a school teacher? He could be teaching your children right now! Jesus, the NRA wants to arm guys like him! carvohi
I gave you *****
And I did get it
Thanks for writing
No double standard!
5*****
A twist...
with hubby trying to work his way back.
tough trick, you did good pulling it off.
Double standard nonetheless but redemption is always good
The story felt real with a double standard looming it still worked for me. Hey we're all not fit for life's rigors and fall less than acceptable to our own standard let alone our spouse's. Reuniting kids to their parents in earnest is always nice redemption is nice. The author never rationalized the cheating husband's behavior leading to the destruction of his marriage. The author never justified to the reader the reason he should've redeemed or forgiven. The ending was a blitz and it felt very rushed. All in all, it was a nice read.
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