good start, now finish it, seems like you both will have a great time, will look forward to your next installment of your story
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Anonymous05/01/13
needs fixing
You need to proof read or have someone do it for you. There are so many mistakes and errors. So if you want people to read your story then do as I suggested and get a proof reader.
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Anonymous05/03/13
excellent start - can't wait for the next chapters!
excellent start - can't wait for the next chapters!
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good start
good start, now finish it, seems like you both will have a great time, will look forward to your next installment of your story
needs fixing
You need to proof read or have someone do it for you. There are so many mistakes and errors. So if you want people to read your story then do as I suggested and get a proof reader.
excellent start - can't wait for the next chapters!
excellent start - can't wait for the next chapters!
Amazing
Great story! Pleaseeeeee continue asap!!!!! So eager
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Can't wait for what's next
hmm
was 2 short of a story looking forward 2 the rest of the story
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