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The Guys' Weekend Ch. 01

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by Anonymous05/20/13

Good start

But it would flow better and be easier to read if you just used quotation marks for the conversations instead of the S and J. Its usually pretty easy to figure out who's talking anyway. :) keep writing though!

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by Anonymous05/20/13

Can't read this with the names formatted like a play - it's too jarring - doesn't work.

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by Anonymous05/21/13

Yup...I agree 100% that you should use quotes. Aside from that...keep goin.

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by Anonymous08/11/14

Hot story

Good story. I had a raging hard-on the whole read.

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