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loving this story
Can't wait to read more!!!
Dude, Your story rocks
This is my new favorite novel in this section. I'm definitely sure i'll love the notion that not all male wolves are built like the hulk (makes it more realistic). This story has a level of depth which is very hard to find and you writing flows ever so sweetly. Can't wait for the next chapter :-)
wow
Love it such a great story. This one of the best in awhile. Thank u for sharing. Also on a side note your story telling was great but it has improved over the 4 stories. Looking forward to more.
Nice
I really like this part of your story, I am hoping for some more chapters and really want to know what happens to this pack! Keep up the good writing!
good but not great
i first must say i love this series. keep writing no matter what haters say u know u r doing your job right. now 4 the hard part i am not being negative just my views on boundaries and kids. please no more shower and bed scenes. ok a little creepy. but Dan and tony roma had me thinkn u r a cowboy fan. go patriots. with all that said still a fan and checkn 4 the next chapter.
@Iloveawere and the rest
@ I understand and there won't be any more with the kids. I have to admit I had to think long and hard but finally decided they worked well with what I was trying to show. It was two main things, were's have a totally different society and also the kids having adopted him and feel save around him and want to help him. There are going to be a couple of small scenes dealing with the kids and how they feel about him as their alpha.
@ everyone else, thanks for the feed back and the next chapter should be posted in the next two days or so. I hope you enjoy it.
great!!!
this is a great story!!! keep it up!!! more!!! 5 stars definitely!!!
My new fave
Love this series.
I have to agree the shower scenes with the pups are pushing the boundaries & bordering on disturbingly creepy. The pups in bed though, if they're as wolves is fine, otherwise it's also creepy.
HE IS GOING TO BE A OVERLORD!!!! LOL!!!
Or at least an Emperor. I really like this story, but Dan is really, really POWERFUL. It's good for me, but I can see it being a problem for some folks who seem to want to try him. HA! Can't wait for your next installment!!
I like!
Interesting story, great job so far!
NEXT!!!!!
Have you submitted 5 yet? Huh? Have you?
Can you tell I like your story?
Captivating!
5*
chapt 5
For those who maybe concerned... I have received chapt 5 from my editor and have submitted it. It should be up in three days or so and hope you love it as much as the other chapters.
Just so you know when I hit ten or so chapters I am going to go back and edit the first few so they make more sense. I didn't have an editor to point out glaring oop's at that point and having reviewed them there are some things that really need to be edited.
Also when chapter 6B hits I have a secondary plot already in the works and when chapter 8 or so hits another plot as well. I am also going to do a series of vignettes of stories that simply couldn't be incorporated in the main story. They are mostly to flesh out the main story and will not have an editor. They are sort of mini-stories that I am thinking up and hope everyone will enjoy them.
Chapt 5 and Vignettes
First for some reason chapt 5 had been rejected. It appears that someone was reviewing it and decided that it had under age sex in it even though it didn't. I have had a volunteer editor read it and didn't find anything. I did make an edit or two and hopefully in the next day or two it will be approved.
On a separate note I have started doing some vignette's that pertain to the main story but are not edited and are simply a sort of filler material. They are going to expand on some of the stories that I can't include in the main stories. They will list what chapters they will be in and hope you enjoy them.
Gets Better with Every Chapter!
I love the list of characters & your comments (like Nikoli). It's nice to see someone who keeps the necessary elements in a story while maintaining the surprises. Well written! 5* isn't high enough!!!
Nikolai
Theres always one. You lay out the ground rules, kill a couple of rule breakers, a few days later theres alwasy one who has to test the bounds and do something totally Amoral you have to rip him a new one and send him on the next life. Nikolai, we will remember you not fondly, but as an object lesson for stupidity and a lack of common sense. You will be an object lesson for children to many packs that proves the theory of micro evolution. That stupidity must die out to make room for the smarts. You will not be missed.
Sincerely, Payenbrant
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