It's best to start at an early age for a man to realize his true place in the scheme of things. Just do what "they" say. No, dammit, don't ask why for Christ sake! You want your dick in "there"? Then shut the fuck up and do what you're told! Jimmy and Larry figured it out REAL fast! What a hoot! And you know...it just don't get any HOTTER than this!
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Anonymous03/09/06
me again
you missed by very little. i don't want to discorage you, but you might agree that the imagery needed a bit more detail. particularly when lynn and jim are cumming. the sensitivity is outstanding and a bit of verbal play might be needed to carry you over into the 4-5 range. i score you at 3.5 because i think you were going for the exhaustion of the boys and missed by that much.
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Anonymous09/08/08
another great treat f/this 63yr old youngster.....YOU THE MAN!!!
if they were ted up how come they didn't need untied? Sounds like the sweet girls gave as well as they got. Good job most is fantastic although after a couple rounds ones control is much better thanks
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Anonymous06/27/13
wow
that was great, obviously have to read entire series from start to getfull effect tho, now i really need a dick lol
I know your wrote already 50 chapters or so... so my comment will probably be ignored
but still, I wanted to give my input
I think you're a lot better at describing the point of view of the boys than the girls
when it's the boys, it's like you are them and you're telling us your story, I'm really into it
however when it's the girls, you use more like a god's point of view, e.g. the point of view that knows it all what goes on.
English
as Larry said "Wow!"
this story was just amazing. i do believe that what you put in the story is an example of the best way to learn what to do on a girl.
Learning curve
It's best to start at an early age for a man to realize his true place in the scheme of things. Just do what "they" say. No, dammit, don't ask why for Christ sake! You want your dick in "there"? Then shut the fuck up and do what you're told! Jimmy and Larry figured it out REAL fast! What a hoot! And you know...it just don't get any HOTTER than this!
me again
you missed by very little. i don't want to discorage you, but you might agree that the imagery needed a bit more detail. particularly when lynn and jim are cumming. the sensitivity is outstanding and a bit of verbal play might be needed to carry you over into the 4-5 range. i score you at 3.5 because i think you were going for the exhaustion of the boys and missed by that much.
another great treat f/this 63yr old youngster.....YOU THE MAN!!!
if they were ted up how come they didn't need untied? Sounds like the sweet girls gave as well as they got. Good job most is fantastic although after a couple rounds ones control is much better thanks
wow
that was great, obviously have to read entire series from start to getfull effect tho, now i really need a dick lol
I know your wrote already 50 chapters or so... so my comment will probably be ignored
but still, I wanted to give my input
I think you're a lot better at describing the point of view of the boys than the girls
when it's the boys, it's like you are them and you're telling us your story, I'm really into it
however when it's the girls, you use more like a god's point of view, e.g. the point of view that knows it all what goes on.
otherwise great stories up until now :p
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