Next Generation Ch. 01

don't know....but maybe????

It looks like whatever came to mind you put down on paper. There is no character development or any background to start with. Doesn't appear that you gave any thought about a storyline or plot. There is a need for an editor to help fine tune withspelling and punturations. You have a good idea here you just need to put more thought into it. Only gave it a 3 but there is room for improvement.

family

oh to be in a family like that. where sex is fun and uninhibited. good story hope to read more.

GREAT

Cant wait for more

Great job. I masturbated the whole time

Good writing. I have never had the courage to be quite that open about sexual things but I have had some wonderful experiences. I am a devoted cross dresser and have been for over 25 years now. May I invite you to correspond with me? My "girly" email addy is: mwylde39 and is at hotmail.com. Please do write.

HOT HOT HOT !!!!!

critics

gebob69 is at it again. ....."you need an editor to help you withspelling and punturations"......I think gebob69 does.

Abandoned Lifestyles

I like you environment in this story, the lack of pretense and acceptance of the swinger lifestyle and the family sex. I gave it a 3 and want to encourage you to keep at it. I will give more comments as I read the next chapters!

Thanks for the hard one can't wait to read part 2.