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Wonderful writing
Omg that was so hot! Please write more!
Wow!
I need a cigarette after reading that. And I don't even smoke! Maybe a cold shower. I was waiting for Mom to catch them there on the dance floor.
Opening is confusing
Because the opening paragraph suggests we are about to read the story of the dissolution of a marriage I expected the narrator to finish on that note. Instead he told the story of a budding love affair and left it there, no final mention of how this affected the marriage. How did the wife find out? Did she find out? Did the husband leave his wife to be with his daughter? Or did he leave her over guilt? If the writer did not intend to answer any of these questions he should not have begun the story as he did.
Patience
Ford2020: The author has left us hanging, wanting to know what happens next. That is one of the hallmarks of a good writer. He probably has another chapter planned . . . and I'm sure you'll read it.
Holy shit!
Totally hot! Thank you! And yes---we all want a chapter two!! What happens next? Will he leave his wife for his daughter? Will they get caught?
DAYYYYYYYYYMNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN:
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!!!!!!!!
SHIZZZZZZZZZZ ZZZZZNETTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!
ENNNNNNNNNNNNN COREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE...............
i'll admit that it'd be awesome to have the 3some (( husband + wife &
daughter )) * however * this story should be above\beyond... it's way
to phenomenal to actually do what most stories actually do... how about
~~~> the husband "" father ""//the daughter - continue with their extreme
sex romps completely behind (( the wife "" mother "" )) when push does come
to shove "" the daughter "" actually forces him choose between her|||her mother
Nice
Finally, after a couple months of trash we get a really good story. It's too bad that it was just this one page.
I would prefer that the mother knew about the impending tryst.... and secretly encouraged it for her own perverted pleasure. Those kinds of stories are hot.
Bravo!
Bravo! Bravo! Encore!!!
Awesome!
Very nicely written, very nice delivery.
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Literally almost puked in my mouth... nothing worse then sex in a public place...Dont you have any decency?
Wonderful!
Damn man! Wish I could go dancing with some young hottie like his daughter!!!
wooooooooow
im not a big fan of short short stories but this one left me gasping wooooooow theres so much of raw power of sex and the dialogues while they are sinning mmmmmmm i only wish that the sex sequence was longer bravo bravo
Besser geht es (fast) nicht mehr
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nice
like it...
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