wanted to say that the story has a nice feel and then a "lust" feel.....enjoyed the way the women met...and moved on and "wanted" each other. Good story...good writing.
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Anonymous12/08/05
Very enjoyable
I really liked how the sort of "general" feeling to the story opens it up for a little more fantasy. It could happen anywhere, anytime, to anyone. Very nice!
The title of this story is clever, and while the play on words could be all in my mind, its a risk I'll take to say I know of the risks of peace.lol
Lemme see, you use vocabulary that shows you are a reader and not just an author. And another thing you likely already knew, you can elicit emotion from the reader as it pertains to their life. Not specifically lust or arousal but reading this, totally took me back to a night in a restaurant w/my then SO.
What a beginning. Now we need some background to understand Ellen's trepidation that she was implying to just before she spotted her friend. Theirs more here. Hopefully you'll revisit this and fill in the blanks.
Either way it rates 5🌟's
English
good moment
wanted to say that the story has a nice feel and then a "lust" feel.....enjoyed the way the women met...and moved on and "wanted" each other. Good story...good writing.
Very enjoyable
I really liked how the sort of "general" feeling to the story opens it up for a little more fantasy. It could happen anywhere, anytime, to anyone. Very nice!
Could be my inherent sarcasm.....
The title of this story is clever, and while the play on words could be all in my mind, its a risk I'll take to say I know of the risks of peace.lol
Lemme see, you use vocabulary that shows you are a reader and not just an author. And another thing you likely already knew, you can elicit emotion from the reader as it pertains to their life. Not specifically lust or arousal but reading this, totally took me back to a night in a restaurant w/my then SO.
Back Story?
Were they lovers before, or did they part before discovering their love?
Why did Ellen leave? Why did she pick this time to return?
Too much unknown, can't get a handle on these two.
Needs More😍
What a beginning. Now we need some background to understand Ellen's trepidation that she was implying to just before she spotted her friend. Theirs more here. Hopefully you'll revisit this and fill in the blanks.
Either way it rates 5🌟's
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