by storywriter123
Important bullets missing from your effort: . No character development, No physical description of either character. No slow build up to to the sex. No post coital by play at the end of the quickie. Definitely a one and done ,not to ever happen again!!!!! You ask us to believe a student could walk into a teachers classroom on a Friday afternoon and turn her on sexually by asking for help with an English assignment. She immediately comes up with an excuse to get him into her apartment so she can fuck him. I want to go back to school at that high school!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I was wondering where his cock came from? When did our wonder boy strip?Goes to the lack of development, lack of character development I tend to agree with the previous comment, no or little relation to reality.
Your criticism will really help me to write better next time! All those pointers you put in there are much appreciated. Thanks again :)