All Comments on 'All Women want a Gang Bang'

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Love it, enjoyed reading and jacking off to it

But it really doesn't matter. This is a powerful erotic and arousing story...and very well written. It is very good masturbation material indeed! If you intended that...then, mission accomplished. Thank you...oh, and more, please, much more!

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From a sub and slave - insanely hot! Wanting to do this right now!

While your story turned me on a bit (and I can certainly relate to wanting to get gangbanged from time to time!) there were a couple things you could do to easily improve your story.

First, write in the past tense. It is the convention for fiction for a reason. In rare instances you can get away with the present tense if it serves some greater dramatic purpose. In a short little tale about getting righteously banged, however, it is simply distracting.

Secondly, the story is a bit light on detail. I think you have some potential, though! So keep working at it!

I look forward to reading more!