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She and her husband got what they deserved. But, he was a wimp in his actions to the daughter. He should have used all legal means to contact the daughter and had a relationship with her. There must have been a great deal of satisfaction in the destruction of the cheating bitch and her new husband. But, there was also destruction in the x-husbands life and humanity.
Nice guys finish last
This guy was the typical "nice guy" until, like all people, he was pushed that last inch to far. This is why one doesn't live life as a "nice guy". If he'd stood up for himself with these three people early on things would have been much better for the two cheaters.
Descent tale and a believable revenge plot. I don't know if you're a native english speaker. If not, well done. If you are, please edit more. The grammar, at times, was rather stunted.
OH YEAH
The one thing in the world I hate the most is a man being destroyed by a cheating slut skank slut whore cunt wife. Added to that is the taking of his daughter away. He should have destroyed the asshole cheating couple sooner and reclaimed his child but he let it go for ten years and then pounced on the dickheads. Excellent revenge. If you think it was too extreme, then you have no clue to how betrayal feels. Take it from me, I know.
I hate cheaters. All should suffer.
Good story
But, Please, Please, Please get an editor. At the very least go back and proof read your work. Some areas were nearly unreadable. G
To partially quote a Chris Rock comedic riff -
I don't condone this story ... but I understand this story ( all too well ).
Editor
Finally
A story about a guy who didn't worry about being too noble or roll with the shit considering himself taking the high road, it is about a guy who didn't worry about showing the ugly other face for the people who deserve it most, and strangely he didn't come out as an asshole, for me at least. Liked the extra couple of lines going far in the future, five stars.
Anon
I like the idea of the story, but you need to flesh the characters out. Give them personalities. Right now its ok, but it could be fantastic.
Be charitable
Be charitable, buy her the bullet.
A BTB TALE
or don't piss off the banker. TK U MLJ LV NV
Proof Read!
The plot wasn't bad, but you certainly need to proof read your work before you submit it.
A Bullet Indeed Needed
But for the loser who can't let go of the past and has become a sadist. Wife was responsible for this and should correct this creation of hers by putting that bullet in his head. He deserves peace and has suffered enough.
He has given up all power to his ex.
I love you
I truely do.
Editing sucks but I fucking love this story.
no reason to be, she destroyed herself
let her end herself
brings out the 'btb' crowd
this was written to appeal to that group of women haters that hang around this site. The wife hindered his ability to have visitation so that deserves the death penalty.
Yeah, right.
Perfection in Pose
Great story can we have another! These cuckold WACC writers have polluting this section over the past weeks thank heavens for you and SS06
Is this an older story that you are reposting?
I ask because I am quite sure I have read it before and the fact that there was no improvement in the text from the previous posting does bother me. It is called lack of respect for your own work..
The central character was as dead to the world as his rival now is and I really feel that there should have been another solution for his daughter. Money is no substitute for love.
Tra la la
A murderer, a moron, and a "btb"er walk into a bar.
Bartender says, "oh, good....a customer."
He was an asshole and wrong for the extent of the revenge. Yes Emily was wrong for cheating and taking Teresa away from him. Why didn't Mike use the same resources he used in the end at the time of the divorce? It was his choice to let Emily have her way with the custody for all those years.
In the end Mike was no better then Emily and the other Mike.
His wife remarried and the second Mike took over raising Teresa.
Because The ex didn't man up, another man had to. The ex didn't care about his wife or his daughter, he only cared about his company, then he tries to buy his daughters affection AFTER she had grown up and destroys his ex and her husband.
Regardless of what she had done, her ex is the villain. She cheated on him, sure; but he left her for his company first. And if he had do much money, then why didn't he get more than 4 days a month? Or was it because that's all he wanted?
great story
i loved the story REVENGE is a dish best served COLD.... brb the cheating slut and good for him let her eat a bullit servers her rite... I have NO USE FOR CHEATERS.... the get what they deserve sooner or later....i have read all your stories now and enjoy every one of them.... keep up the good work
took a while
took a while, but they finally got theirs. Mike explained it really well. Good for him.
THANK YUOU
No
The second Mike deserved to have his life ruined
after all, he did hurt the first Mike's feelings and all.
Excellent
A good story about a real man pushed to the wall and his retribution. At last a no wimp no willing cuckold story. Anyone who does not like the story or the revenge is either a woman, a wimp and a cuckold.
Well done author and yes, buy the box of bullets for her [no charge].
Stupid slut deserves all the consequences bestowed upon her.
Wrong Title for Story
Anger Delayed? I don’t think so. As the author wrote, “I got up in the morning and decided to do something that I never thought about in the last 10 years - turn into a vengeful bastard.” It reads more like a story in the newspaper about a gay who mutilates his significant other while in a rage. (The newspaper article was edited better though.)
huh?
This was one of the worse written stories i've ever read on lite, did you even go back and reread what you wrote? You time and time again mix up emily and teresa and throughout the story i don't know if he was talking to himself or a brick wall it was just words on a screen no plot, no story, no flow, just a jumble of confusion.
Cold Hearted
But considering what was Done to Mike#1 Mike #2 and the B!tch got what they deserved.
Nice
A refreshing break from the wimp-praising trash on this site.
Consequences
I believe in consequences for actions...but this is unreasonable, since when is divorce worthy of the death penalty?
I always enjoy Double D stories.
He is a master of revenge and we always know his characters will do more than just get even.
Good
I do not like, when the custody winner parent plays with the connection between children other parent. She deserved this for ruining the connection between Theresa and her Dad.
Modern Figaro type revenge story with Romantic Revenge parts. 5*****
We read two stories.......
@M48gunner We read other story. He would never has done any revenge, if the extrem villain exwife had been a fair parent. She destroyed the Dad daughter connection and this was over the top with the wedding plan. He became extrem mad.............
Grammar
That is the difference between the story that you wrote and a 4* story. I won't comment on the subject as I enjoy BTB stories. The writing is as good as any of your other stories with the exception of the grammatical errors which had a negative effect on the story. Please take the same effort as you did on previous stories to reduce grammatical errors.
Careful
I fear that if you did buy her a bullet, then she may just decide to use it on you (Mike that is, not dangerouslydead of course, who I'm sure is a nice sort of guy)
Find an editor.
who will help you with logic and plot. Hard to believe a rich CEO of a large company does not know how to speak proper English or where to find a good lawyer.
for all you self-righteous asshats who say he went too far:
fuck you and the horse you rode in on
When it's YOUR story, you can have the characters behave any damn way you want.
But guess what?
THIS TIME IT'S NOT YOUR FUCKIN' STORY.
It's DD's tale of delayed vengence, not yours.
so please, drop the self-righteous bullshit, and just enjoy the tale for what it is.
Thank you
Now that is the
way you write a BTB story,
Liked it a lot
Well constructed Dangerously; I too enjoy the BTB story line. I hate when the abused, beaten down, cuckolded husband forgives the tramp that pissed on his life. Both Emily and Mike the second got what they deserved!!!
Fives
Man you can really came up with a great revenge story. Totally awesome. Even the cheater taking his own life. I believe some of the people that write you feed back base their replies on feelings and not on the great job of revenge you portrayed in your short story. I loved it. Just cold to the bone. Keep writing. Fives all the way. LOL
if your gonna anon your own crap
At least learn how to spell. He gets pissed off that his daughter did not want him to give her away I wonder why, he could have used his cash to get better custody.. Really she found guy with the same name to fuck ? Then you had the mom going on honeymoon with her son in law.Get real.
Loved the story idea, but...
The idea, plot line, and the execution were great and our hero definitely laid the smackdown on his tormentors in good fashion.
The downside being that, as much as there were good points in the story, the grammatical errors were distracting to a great degree and kept me from truly enjoying the story as I should have. Get an editor in the future.
College
not collage. And all the numerous other misspellings. If you are going to reprint try reviewing and fixing next time. Grammar still an issue.
Reinquist! Help!
I don't mind reposts , they should be checked before doing it. The problems with this are huge
I was hoping to like this as I was in a similar position. But, if you go to the judge with evidence that the ex-wife is interfering with reasonable visitation, the courts WILL insure that the order is complied with, piano, soccer, and what all lessons be damned. SO, he had no one to blame but himself.
And going after the second husbands business after tens years is extremely petty.
The grammar was atrocious as was the spelling. Don't you have Spell Check? Yes, I am an English Nazi because this is our primary language, Shouldn't we try to show it a bit of respect? You also need to show your reader some respect by submitting your best efforts and I hope this wasn't it.
Best you can get is two stars.
I so love it...
... when everybody in a story gets exactly what they so richly deserve.
Back Off Chagrined!
quote-"the courts WILL insure(?)" or is it ensure??
English Nazi...yeah right! spot on you are mate...before pointing fingers you would be better served to first put your own silly comment through the spell/grammar/syntax checker of your word processor.
Oh Hell Yeah !!!!!
To hell with the grammar mistakes or the wrong english or wht the English prude has said. I was enjoying the story and was so engrossed in it i didnt notice the anything wrong. I m here for a good revenge fuck story. I got that and now i m moving on.
Sick
You need to take some of that money and go to a good doctor!!
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