With the style of the writing and the vivid descriptions that are given you have a good shot at the world of romance novels. The only thing you are missing is a tad bit more story. Stories that have sex in them are great. Stories that are comprised entirely of sex are only so-so. Overall great job and keep up the good work.
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Anonymous09/21/12
The precum is dripping from my cock.
He should have eaten her asshole out while he was down there. I'm sure it would have tasted delicious.
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Anonymous10/04/13
don't know what the others read
but this was a piss poor writing job way to many stupid errors like wrong words etc.
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With the style of the writing and the vivid descriptions that are given you have a good shot at the world of romance novels. The only thing you are missing is a tad bit more story. Stories that have sex in them are great. Stories that are comprised entirely of sex are only so-so. Overall great job and keep up the good work.
The precum is dripping from my cock.
He should have eaten her asshole out while he was down there. I'm sure it would have tasted delicious.
don't know what the others read
but this was a piss poor writing job way to many stupid errors like wrong words etc.
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