The Ballad of Zachery Carson Ch. 07

Thanks for the tale!

Well, I read all seven chapters, even though I generally don't care for Westerns.

I enjoyed it thoroughly, my only real gripe being how you spelled Zach's first name(although perhaps "Zachery" is a variant spelling of "Zachary" with which I am not familiar).

There were a handful of grammar/spelling/punctuation problems, but not enough to distract from my overall enjoyment of the tale.

Oh, and the ending is not what I (nor most of your readers, I'd wager) wanted nor expected, but that's not neccesarily a bad thing.

Thanks for sharing all of this with us!

Well, not what I was hoping for, but probably more realistic. Kathleen would not likely have settled for a frontier redneck given her upbringing and status in England.

I know it's your story but....

...that was not the ending I was looking for.

Missing

It seems as though there was 2 or 3 chapters missing. Almost like you ran up on the ending and since it was there you just ended it. I otherwise enjoyed it a lot

Very good story!

Enjoyed this story very much. However, I had a different ending in mind. I too thought the time span from when the 3 left for St. Louis was rushed. At least we the readers weren't left wondering about the ending. Thank You

Patience

I did enjoy the story and the ending did not bother me. Surprises are to be expected. But I am patiently waiting for the next story !!

Good show, eh what!

Nice change of pace, not going for the obvious romance; I wondered about the lack of that tension right from the get-go. Nor did I mind the narrative jumps. Too many erotica writers get caught up in trivia in some of these longer works, often seeming almost unable to break away from a tedious day-to-day description of events. It can add drama to deal with things in a "guess what we did" style. If I wanted real time, all I'd have to do is shut off my computer.

I like your stories and careful, serious writing. Thanks.

good story

i know it is obvious but i prefer him marrying kathleen. the end should be longer. develope the relationship with pilar abd throw in another adventure or two with her.

Pilar was better for Zach

I think Kathleen would have been too high-maintenance for Zach. I have to agree with ReiDeBastos that "Zachery" is a misspelling. When Zach met with the Apaches, he said he was named after a hero of his faith. Assuming he was raised in the Judeo-Christian heritage, he would have been referring to Zacharias, father of John the Baptist. Zachary is the Anglicized version of Zacharias.