I personaly prefer the Modern Figaro Type (MFTRS) and the Romantic Revenge Stories (RRS), but CRS (Cruel Revenge Story) may be interesting too, morover not deadly Cruel Revenge principles I used in my more stories as well.
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Anonymous05/31/13
Just bad.
no plot. Hate the bitch and kill her. What a genius.
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Anonymous05/31/13
What the fuck is wrong with the author and the readers?
First of all, this was a retarded story with a dialogue and plot that makes 80's porn look like haute culture. I couldn't slog my way through this if you dragged me with a crane.
Second, since when does a moral wrong justify murder? That's like saying its ok to kill everyone in a vehicle because they cut you off on the freeway.
Finally, you're trying to tell us that his wife was completely unable to resist her lover? Good thing she didn't see her on the street because she would have NO CHOICE but to have we'd right then and there. Seriously?
You are a fucking joke and I would take it as a personal favor if you didn't write another mother fucking word.
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Anonymous05/31/13
I think
The writer did a change up, and this is a different ending than originally conceived to appease the masses. As Duna said cruel, but I will also add just.
Identify the problem and fix it! As for murder - innocent until proven guilty; in this case, no crime was committed, the duly constituted authorities said so! I give it 5 stars.
this was a nice twist to a btb story. He should have dumped the whore but he did find a way to fix the problems in his marriage. Gave it a 5, nice story miko.
This is a fictional story, there is nothing wrong if murder is part of a fictional story. I dont confuse fiction with real life. mikoli5763, ignore the negative comments and keep writing.
Yes I agree, some people critizied a cuck story and the commenter got similar answer. What the commenter was here and there about the sexual minority husband story, because that story is fictional.
Yes a Cruel Revenge Story which goes to the murder it is first FICTIONAL (same to the sexual minority husband stories) too, second it may be TRAGIC (as a high literature tragedy as well), if the story is written well.
...why? There is nothing in this story that was necessary to the first. If you wanted this kind of closure why didn't you do it in the original? Simply a waste of time in my opinion.
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Anonymous05/31/13
Awesome!!!!!1
Kick ass, great story.
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Anonymous05/31/13
i agree
when your wife says she wants you but cant resist another also..and they have a history of stalking..then yes kill the bitch and yes at times there is collateral damage..sorry steve..you didn't have to marry a bitch either
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Anonymous05/31/13
Delightfully evil
Did what he had to do in the face of a determined enemy of no conscience. Although, he could have exposed them to the authorities for the planned drugging as a nonleyhsl alternative. But in the duress of attack we sometimes reach for yhe nearest dolution.
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Anonymous05/31/13
Short and to the point. Well done.
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Anonymous05/31/13
Anyone who likes this ending ,needs help,murder is murder , not justified here.
Pathetic ending , the author did not have to murder them off, they are many other ways of fixing the problem.so this author is saying murder is just. Pretty sad.
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Anonymous05/31/13
just a story
The author is saying that the main character though the murder was justified. That does not mean that the author thinks so.
I must be one of the people that the Anon says needs help. I like the story and the ending. You fuck with me and I'll cut your heart out and shove it up your ass.
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Anonymous05/31/13
taking two people lifes for a women who wants her friends pussy
pretty sick story here. those who think this is just should be locked up..
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Anonymous05/31/13
Psycho husband
Mel didn't dare leave her husband because she knew he would eventually come after her and kill her.
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Anonymous05/31/13
I like BTBs
but there's still a thing called "over the line". Having someone wreck your marriage is not the equivalent of murder, and never has been. Only a completely psychotic retard commits an act of cold-blooded murder for no other reason than to protect his weak-minded slut wife from her own sluttiness.
If he trusted her so little that what he was doing really constituted protecting their marriage, then the loser doesn't have a marriage to begin with - not because of him, but because of her. Her weak-mindedness is not an excuse, and the second she pulled it out again, he should have divorced the whore.
Making your cuck into a psychotic freak doesn't make him less of a cuck.
why the low score, this is a good story.
the dead cunt and her fuck budy intended to take what belonged to the husband. they tried to drug him and destroy his marriage.
first he left the area and they followed him refusing the wifes demands to leave her alone.
well they pissed him off, tried to drug him and in effect rape his wife.
it is killin time, and that is not overkill.
when they burgle your house time after time and keep[ trying, eventually you just gotta kill them to make it stop.
they could have backed off but refused to.
good, now they are dead.
Steve was NOT a collateral damage though, as you say in the tale. He was a willing accomplice to his psycho wife Pam. Collateral Damage is defined as acceptable civilian casualties. Steve was anything but a civilian in this. He was in on his wife's twisted plan all along, and even got transferred in his job JUST so his psycho slut wife could get her old lesbian lover back. He enabled her, thus making him just as guilty as Pam. They basically terrorized the hubby and wife, never leaving them alone. Finally, the hubby had to take drastic action to keep the psycho couple away from them forever. Murder? No. Proactive self defense? Yes.
I LOVE IT. A man's gotta do what a man's gotta do to protect what is his. Sometimes you need a little violence to keep the peace.
OH YEAH
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Anonymous06/05/13
Should have left her first time.
He should've divorced her in the first place and move away without telling her. Let her stay with Pam have her take care of that heartless slut that was going to die anyway on Pam not on him.
even the wife's death..like she was gonna ever be of any use in the marriage again..damaged goods are never better and always better dumped than trying to use them. the other main thing is watch out who you fuck with, religions an counties all kill people that fuck with them.. and how are they punished?. If you reach into a mans life to fuck with it then you could be killed...its not murder.. it is not for selfish reasons but self protection..with any thing in the natural world(god made to all you religious right to lifers) we live in if you fuck with the beast you get bitten, and a man is part of that order so we bit back, civilization is just the lie weak people use to due the same thing without getting their hands dirty.
I love that ending. It is a great way to end to pieces of shit. People who mess with other peoples marriage deserve the harshest punishment available. Perhaps the tumor explain the poor impulse control?
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Anonymous01/15/14
oh puhlease people its a story. Bit different of an ending than the usual everyone fucks everyone senseless, seems somewhat rushed though. My only critique is that maybe a wife would tell someone to stop calling her husband bastard etc, or maybe she agrees somehow?
Would I let a real life person get away with murder like that? Of course not! But this is a STORY. Many people loved "Dexter". He was a MURDERER! Just because the people he killed deserved it doesn't make it right, but we all followed him and cheered him on!
I agree that Steve was hardly "collateral damage". He was a fully invested party in a plot to either force Stan into a wife-swapping scenario or force him into a ruinous divorce and steal his wife!
One final thing - this supposed "mind control" is bull shit. She could have resisted Pam if she wanted to. Here is my non-lethal solution: For the few days prior to the party Stan pees into a bucket and lets it get nice and rank. Then when Pam opens the door, Mel tells her to stay the hell away from her, and dumps the piss over her head! She'd get the message!
It's just a story, but it is a very good one. I think it gives voice to how many men feel about threats to their marriages. Is murder wrong, yes, but then I don't consider what happens when a man is defending his wife, home and marriage murder, more of a case of self defense.
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Anonymous07/18/14
re: It's A STORY, People!
Newsflash: THEY'RE ALL STORIES! Where do you draw the line? Using your logic, any criticism is illogical because, hey, it's just a story.
Also, if it's just a story, why are you defending it? If it's just a story, that implies it's rather inconsequential.
The "it's just a story" defense is superficial and simplistic.
I didn't care for the story but I read it all. I have no problem with what happened to Steve and Pam. They were both low-lifes and to follow them to a different city shows they had a screw or two loose. Pam was warned to stay away. The husband protected his marriage.
The problem I have with the story is that the husband should have left after the first time. You can't love what isn't yours. I really don't understand this "she controlled my mind" bull. The wife wanted it and liked it with Pam, using her own mind. If he had dumped her after the first time, he doesn't become a murderer. He should have let them have her, Then Pam could have controlled her all she wanted. He would have been a lot happier.
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Anonymous09/17/14
Bravo mikoli
I think this was a great story, You are rapidly becoming my all time favourite writer on this site.
As for the story itself, what needed to happen happened. So what if the slime bag dyke and her equally lowlife husband got killed. That's what should happen more often to scum like them in these tales.
5 stars
After reading some of the anonymous comments on F/F cheating, I wanted to throw up. This was going to end badly no matter how you wrote it, but ol' Stan is a cold-blooded murderer. Colorado won't execute the guy responsible for the 2012 theater massacre (although only one juror didn't favor giving him the needle), so presumably they won't execute Stan (someday some CSI team WILL figure out what he did and bust him), but they will bury him alive in a state prison, probably with the sentence in the title.(99 years for murder, LWOP for aggravated murder and 20 years for arson, served consecutively).
First they would need to suspect it as a murder not accidental death.
No state spends the money to investigate every death as if it was a murder.
Once it is declared accidental it is a closed case.
To police and other LE agencies closed cases are good, open cases are bad.
Also unless the dead couple left a message containing their own plans to commit felonies against the husband there is no reason for him to be suspected.
As it is no one even knows they were in the house.
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Anonymous01/14/16
He should have gotten rid of the problem in the first place
The problem was Mel and when he found out she was cheating on him he simply should have filed for divorce and sued the Company. At least he could have come out of the divorce with his half (and maybe more) and some money from the Company and not had to worry the rest of his life about his wife being a lesbian. Okay story, bad ending.
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Anonymous02/06/17
Stupid Americans
You argue about which fictional revenge is best or if it's bad to have revenge on Lesbian cheaters because punishing them because they're girls is bad?
Stupid I bet you're some of the same people who wanted England to separate from the EU or who voted for Donald Trump for president dumb dumb.
Wake the fuck up!
Worry about something that matters to the fictional story!
Arguing about stuff matching real life where you are from makes no sense. Hell a lot of you sound like you are from Mars!
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Anonymous02/11/17
Stupid Anonymous European Shit-Head 02/16/17
You're an idiot for assuming that the idiots you're arguing with are Americans. For thinking that we had anything to do with the UK (not England, you fucking illiterate cheese-eating douchebag) separating from the European Union (Not Europe, you complete and utter shit eating ass), you're a complete incompetent and stupidly ignorant fart-sniffing ass-licker. This is just a story, you ignorant pustulant wart on festering diseased gonad!
English
Dealing with the problem
harshly and effectively. While I don't condone murder, the guy did what had to be done to solve the problem.
Good job
Great ending to a crappy tale. Fuck cheating wives. Kill the people that encourage them to cheat! (just don't get caught!)
:)
Good ending didnt see that coming ummm longer though please
CRS
A cruel revenge story.............
My preferation rank is: MFTRS and RRS > CRS
I personaly prefer the Modern Figaro Type (MFTRS) and the Romantic Revenge Stories (RRS), but CRS (Cruel Revenge Story) may be interesting too, morover not deadly Cruel Revenge principles I used in my more stories as well.
Just bad.
no plot. Hate the bitch and kill her. What a genius.
What the fuck is wrong with the author and the readers?
First of all, this was a retarded story with a dialogue and plot that makes 80's porn look like haute culture. I couldn't slog my way through this if you dragged me with a crane.
Second, since when does a moral wrong justify murder? That's like saying its ok to kill everyone in a vehicle because they cut you off on the freeway.
Finally, you're trying to tell us that his wife was completely unable to resist her lover? Good thing she didn't see her on the street because she would have NO CHOICE but to have we'd right then and there. Seriously?
You are a fucking joke and I would take it as a personal favor if you didn't write another mother fucking word.
I think
The writer did a change up, and this is a different ending than originally conceived to appease the masses. As Duna said cruel, but I will also add just.
Naysayers be damned -
Identify the problem and fix it! As for murder - innocent until proven guilty; in this case, no crime was committed, the duly constituted authorities said so! I give it 5 stars.
let me be the first to give this a 25 star
this was a nice twist to a btb story. He should have dumped the whore but he did find a way to fix the problems in his marriage. Gave it a 5, nice story miko.
Fiction
This is a fictional story, there is nothing wrong if murder is part of a fictional story. I dont confuse fiction with real life. mikoli5763, ignore the negative comments and keep writing.
The answer is right because Fictional and Tragic
Yes I agree, some people critizied a cuck story and the commenter got similar answer. What the commenter was here and there about the sexual minority husband story, because that story is fictional.
Yes a Cruel Revenge Story which goes to the murder it is first FICTIONAL (same to the sexual minority husband stories) too, second it may be TRAGIC (as a high literature tragedy as well), if the story is written well.
he protected his family
all wimp loving pukes get over it.
HOW FAR NOT TO PUSH
or ask how far is too far, TK U MLJ LV NV
Nice
Passive aggressive, anyone? Never push the small guy in the corner. He'll snap.
My only comment is
...why? There is nothing in this story that was necessary to the first. If you wanted this kind of closure why didn't you do it in the original? Simply a waste of time in my opinion.
Awesome!!!!!1
Kick ass, great story.
i agree
when your wife says she wants you but cant resist another also..and they have a history of stalking..then yes kill the bitch and yes at times there is collateral damage..sorry steve..you didn't have to marry a bitch either
Delightfully evil
Did what he had to do in the face of a determined enemy of no conscience. Although, he could have exposed them to the authorities for the planned drugging as a nonleyhsl alternative. But in the duress of attack we sometimes reach for yhe nearest dolution.
Short and to the point. Well done.
Anyone who likes this ending ,needs help,murder is murder , not justified here.
Pathetic ending , the author did not have to murder them off, they are many other ways of fixing the problem.so this author is saying murder is just. Pretty sad.
just a story
The author is saying that the main character though the murder was justified. That does not mean that the author thinks so.
you try to mess with a man's pussy you can get a severe case of death. works for me.
The cunt responsible
for them having to move was the wife. The rest of the story is just swill.
Question for the commentors
Is Anonymous your first or second names?
As for the story -- so-so. Not a bad ending but it was rushed and very poorly written.
LOL!!
I must be one of the people that the Anon says needs help. I like the story and the ending. You fuck with me and I'll cut your heart out and shove it up your ass.
taking two people lifes for a women who wants her friends pussy
pretty sick story here. those who think this is just should be locked up..
Psycho husband
Mel didn't dare leave her husband because she knew he would eventually come after her and kill her.
I like BTBs
but there's still a thing called "over the line". Having someone wreck your marriage is not the equivalent of murder, and never has been. Only a completely psychotic retard commits an act of cold-blooded murder for no other reason than to protect his weak-minded slut wife from her own sluttiness.
If he trusted her so little that what he was doing really constituted protecting their marriage, then the loser doesn't have a marriage to begin with - not because of him, but because of her. Her weak-mindedness is not an excuse, and the second she pulled it out again, he should have divorced the whore.
Making your cuck into a psychotic freak doesn't make him less of a cuck.
why the low score, this is a good story.
the dead cunt and her fuck budy intended to take what belonged to the husband. they tried to drug him and destroy his marriage.
first he left the area and they followed him refusing the wifes demands to leave her alone.
well they pissed him off, tried to drug him and in effect rape his wife.
it is killin time, and that is not overkill.
when they burgle your house time after time and keep[ trying, eventually you just gotta kill them to make it stop.
they could have backed off but refused to.
good, now they are dead.
I'm with cantbuymy on this one.
Steve was NOT a collateral damage though, as you say in the tale. He was a willing accomplice to his psycho wife Pam. Collateral Damage is defined as acceptable civilian casualties. Steve was anything but a civilian in this. He was in on his wife's twisted plan all along, and even got transferred in his job JUST so his psycho slut wife could get her old lesbian lover back. He enabled her, thus making him just as guilty as Pam. They basically terrorized the hubby and wife, never leaving them alone. Finally, the hubby had to take drastic action to keep the psycho couple away from them forever. Murder? No. Proactive self defense? Yes.
5 Big Stars.
Extremely Severe
I LOVE IT. A man's gotta do what a man's gotta do to protect what is his. Sometimes you need a little violence to keep the peace.
OH YEAH
Should have left her first time.
He should've divorced her in the first place and move away without telling her. Let her stay with Pam have her take care of that heartless slut that was going to die anyway on Pam not on him.
i like it but...
I really feel sorry for Steve!
this was a great ending
even the wife's death..like she was gonna ever be of any use in the marriage again..damaged goods are never better and always better dumped than trying to use them. the other main thing is watch out who you fuck with, religions an counties all kill people that fuck with them.. and how are they punished?. If you reach into a mans life to fuck with it then you could be killed...its not murder.. it is not for selfish reasons but self protection..with any thing in the natural world(god made to all you religious right to lifers) we live in if you fuck with the beast you get bitten, and a man is part of that order so we bit back, civilization is just the lie weak people use to due the same thing without getting their hands dirty.
TILL DEATH DO US PART
has a new meaning with imposed, TK U MLJ LV NV
Perfect!
I love that ending. It is a great way to end to pieces of shit. People who mess with other peoples marriage deserve the harshest punishment available. Perhaps the tumor explain the poor impulse control?
oh puhlease people its a story. Bit different of an ending than the usual everyone fucks everyone senseless, seems somewhat rushed though. My only critique is that maybe a wife would tell someone to stop calling her husband bastard etc, or maybe she agrees somehow?
It's A STORY, People!
Would I let a real life person get away with murder like that? Of course not! But this is a STORY. Many people loved "Dexter". He was a MURDERER! Just because the people he killed deserved it doesn't make it right, but we all followed him and cheered him on!
I agree that Steve was hardly "collateral damage". He was a fully invested party in a plot to either force Stan into a wife-swapping scenario or force him into a ruinous divorce and steal his wife!
One final thing - this supposed "mind control" is bull shit. She could have resisted Pam if she wanted to. Here is my non-lethal solution: For the few days prior to the party Stan pees into a bucket and lets it get nice and rank. Then when Pam opens the door, Mel tells her to stay the hell away from her, and dumps the piss over her head! She'd get the message!
Great story
It's just a story, but it is a very good one. I think it gives voice to how many men feel about threats to their marriages. Is murder wrong, yes, but then I don't consider what happens when a man is defending his wife, home and marriage murder, more of a case of self defense.
re: It's A STORY, People!
Newsflash: THEY'RE ALL STORIES! Where do you draw the line? Using your logic, any criticism is illogical because, hey, it's just a story.
Also, if it's just a story, why are you defending it? If it's just a story, that implies it's rather inconsequential.
The "it's just a story" defense is superficial and simplistic.
Huh!!!
I didn't care for the story but I read it all. I have no problem with what happened to Steve and Pam. They were both low-lifes and to follow them to a different city shows they had a screw or two loose. Pam was warned to stay away. The husband protected his marriage.
The problem I have with the story is that the husband should have left after the first time. You can't love what isn't yours. I really don't understand this "she controlled my mind" bull. The wife wanted it and liked it with Pam, using her own mind. If he had dumped her after the first time, he doesn't become a murderer. He should have let them have her, Then Pam could have controlled her all she wanted. He would have been a lot happier.
Bravo mikoli
I think this was a great story, You are rapidly becoming my all time favourite writer on this site.
As for the story itself, what needed to happen happened. So what if the slime bag dyke and her equally lowlife husband got killed. That's what should happen more often to scum like them in these tales.
5 stars
Hoo-hoo
I love a happy ending.
Life Without Parole Plus 119 Years
After reading some of the anonymous comments on F/F cheating, I wanted to throw up. This was going to end badly no matter how you wrote it, but ol' Stan is a cold-blooded murderer. Colorado won't execute the guy responsible for the 2012 theater massacre (although only one juror didn't favor giving him the needle), so presumably they won't execute Stan (someday some CSI team WILL figure out what he did and bust him), but they will bury him alive in a state prison, probably with the sentence in the title.(99 years for murder, LWOP for aggravated murder and 20 years for arson, served consecutively).
Bet on it.
@Captain Midnight
First they would need to suspect it as a murder not accidental death.
No state spends the money to investigate every death as if it was a murder.
Once it is declared accidental it is a closed case.
To police and other LE agencies closed cases are good, open cases are bad.
Also unless the dead couple left a message containing their own plans to commit felonies against the husband there is no reason for him to be suspected.
As it is no one even knows they were in the house.
He should have gotten rid of the problem in the first place
The problem was Mel and when he found out she was cheating on him he simply should have filed for divorce and sued the Company. At least he could have come out of the divorce with his half (and maybe more) and some money from the Company and not had to worry the rest of his life about his wife being a lesbian. Okay story, bad ending.
Stupid Americans
You argue about which fictional revenge is best or if it's bad to have revenge on Lesbian cheaters because punishing them because they're girls is bad?
Stupid I bet you're some of the same people who wanted England to separate from the EU or who voted for Donald Trump for president dumb dumb.
Wake the fuck up!
Worry about something that matters to the fictional story!
Arguing about stuff matching real life where you are from makes no sense. Hell a lot of you sound like you are from Mars!
Stupid Anonymous European Shit-Head 02/16/17
You're an idiot for assuming that the idiots you're arguing with are Americans. For thinking that we had anything to do with the UK (not England, you fucking illiterate cheese-eating douchebag) separating from the European Union (Not Europe, you complete and utter shit eating ass), you're a complete incompetent and stupidly ignorant fart-sniffing ass-licker. This is just a story, you ignorant pustulant wart on festering diseased gonad!
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