Blue Moon

this is rape, not sexy

It is not doing it for me, this is sexy for him but not for her. It is just rape. And is making her bleed really necessary?

He is a loser.

To the last reviewer- this is nonconsent. Don't like don't read.

Personally, I love where this is going so far! Keep up the good work!

Nice, when's the next chapter coming?

And yeah, this is nonconsent and this does do it for some people, men and women.

please don't make us wait long for chapter 2

GREAT first try.

I've called this story "Is it just a game....?" elsewhere.

More to come

I liked the first part and looking forward to part 2,3 ect.The story is a story of rape not role play rape it should be on the rough side, I enjoyed the read.

Got stuck on one part...

I see things as I read the words. When his cock is shoved so far down her throat and hand tightly fisted in her hair, her head is effectively immobilized,yet he back hands her (back handing is usually across the face.)

This is the only part I found issue with only because it didn't flow with the visual. In back handing her, he didn't remove his cock from her mouth, so he was hitting himself as well.