A Little Imagination

Excellent

Great tale. Right to the point. Enough said.

Quite good.

Although a short followup to see the just rewards they reap would be entertaining! Good job!

Excellent story!

Thank you for sharing it with us. It is unfortunate that can end a story saying there will be no sequel and right off the bat, you get a request for a sequel. Sometimes I wonder why you guys take comments at all.

Rerun?

Methinks I read this story once before, but it was posted today as a new one.

It is an old story

This story was posted on another site earlier and is posted on Lit for the first time.

I have multiple scenarios for what happened next in my head... I am just not sure if there is enough to actually fill enough pages for a sequel.

Nice but totally impossible flash story. And there is a camera showing the inside of almost every jail and many show the inside of the cells too.

Only in America

In my country the husband dies resisting arrest. Maybe the officer that shoot him be separated from the force and rehired in another city or state.

confused??

was the chief fucking the detectives wife too? It reads like the lawyer just wants to raise doubts in the detectives mind, but it also reads like he has proof from the P.I. report. All I'm saying is that it was confusing. Beyond that, I do find it hard to believe the jail cell wasn't under surveliance and monitored. What I really liked about this, is that so many feel like the legal system will fail them, and if you are smart enough, you just might get the legal system to work FOR you. Thanks for a thought provoking flash story.

Really enjoyed this flsah story

It seems quite plausible in most instances with possible exemption of actually finding a wife who was so pathetically inept at hiding the steps of her betrayal. Maybe she was so enthralled with her fuck toy that she lost all sense of logic, but I doubt it. Maybe she was very bright and was very gullible which would explain her initial involvement with another man, although that seems a little weak too. The Chief of Police is one we would think is too bright to become ensnared by the husband but elevation in a police force does not necessarily mean intellect rather it means political savvy. Lastly with a strong pre-nup in place that specifically stated that adultery was grounds for divorce and would leave the adulterous wife with only what she brought into the marriage should have been a very strong deterrent to cheating. So that leaves the stupid wife angle the most likely.

Well Done

and an interesting twist to the normal getting revenge and BTB story.

I agree with others that a sequel would be nice. It's fairly obvious that James has everything under control but it would be interesting to see the author's take on how and how much the Chief and the wife suffer and what happens after the news conference.

Thanks for the hard work and please keep the stories coming.

Woodmanone

Excellent start

Now one of the good writers, like yourself, needs to finish it.

Its perfect

Leave it like that.

My 2 Cents

Fine the way it is though I would have liked "YOUR" imagination to develop the repercussions of the affair

These stories may be a bit of fun from time to time but they are really very frustrating. I can imagine shit on my own. I come here to read a story. You know with a beginning, middle and end.

I liked that!

Short and to the point!

Nice Sketch

No beginning or end, but that is not a problem for me!

amusing plotting

However -
It requires that the police respond using formal actions, when in fact I think they would do the work off the time sheet.... you would have to have everything you do on video to catch a policeman doing "work" after hours.
Interesting idea which has been not as developed as some of those in the LW genre. It does show up though - I can remember at least one on setting up the couple for a legal fall, and one similar to set up the cop - "Desperate Measures" by Papatoad for the last is a bit of enjoyable silliness. Recommended.

Green-something

CREATE A PLAN

and follow it through....the outcome is always unknown, TK U MLJ LV NV

Nice

Great way for retribution against a public official who should know better and a skank who got to big for her britches.

Dont stop here.

This is awesome, please continue.

good

Well thought out. Loved it.

"Loving wives"...?

And we get bad Dick Tracy.

This is Literotica

Sick story from sick mind.

Good Story

I Liked It ! I am not a NAZI but offer this mild assessment. Only misspelled word I noticed was "Precinct". Grammar was appropriate. Story line was easy to follow.

Maybe

For all we know from the story the wife takes him to the cleaners in the divorce. Maybe his prenup sucked. Maybe she hired a hit man and had him killed. Maybe she had him beaten weekly for the rest of his life. Maybe, maybe ,maybe. That's the problem with a story with no ending.

Yes.

Me like story. Nice of you to let our imaginations finish it.

Broken nose

The most erotic part (and only if you're a masochist) is the self-broken nose! Caught, of course, on video - as it was happening and still on the DVD!)

Otherwise, I really enjoyed it!

Good Read***

This with some of your earlier stories should give you the honor of being crowned the king of HALFASS STORIES. But at least they are well written. Thanks for sharing what little bit you did with us.

If you couldn't be bothered to re-read your first draft, why the fuck should we be bothered to read it?

Great Story Line

This story is one that displays creative originality --- conceptually A+, carried out with fine tuning!

I almost *punished* the author

for, as another poster, "chytown," said the author's doing a "half story."

the story is, obviously, well thought-out and written, from beginning to its half-end...

and for that half-end stunt, I almost gave the author a 4-star rating; but IT IS a really good little half-story.

I really like the PERRY MASON-ish quality of it; I used to love the Perry Mason shows, when I was young. But then I never watched a really juicy Perry Mason episode that just unceremoniously ended in the middle of an oral argument session.

(Odd tidbits: Shows and books like PERRY MASON, etc are what have DISTORTED some people into fantasizing that the past --- the further into the past you go, the better, they say --- was easier, better, with better morality and ethics, since the bad guy was always in the court room, or within the law, MERELY awaiting the story line to end, so they could just get up and say, "Yeah, it's me. I did it.")

Nonetheless, I gave the author a 5-star rating, due to the half-story's FUN, well half-though-out nature. 'Tis TRULY one of those "no pain, no gain" stories!

really?

Improbable but well written, you arrogant bastard.

I've read read this story before.

I thought it was rushed then too. I think you're an O.K writer but you are constantly writing half-ass stories. Every single one of your stories are half-assed. It's like you get bored pretty quickly with the story or you run out of things to write about, which would explain you posting the same story you posted on SOL. I used to have you as my favorite writer but your continuously shitty endings forced me to remove you. If you don't care enough to fully invest in a story plot/ending why write it? Like in this story, what happened to the wife & the chief? You might don't think it's relevant but I do. From the comments I can see I'm not the only one who thinks you're a bit lazy when it comes to your stories they are all rushed, with no ending leaving readers annoyed and unsatisfied

Good one

It's a shame that the good stories always seem to have a shortened or cliff hanger endings. These non WACC stories are getting very rare this section so when one comes along you want it to last for pages!!! You can never get enough of a good story in this section. Thanks and craft us another one please

Total failure

Just another author trying and failing to be clever by not finishing his story and leaving it to the reader's imagination. It was a good start, clever even, but either you ran out of imaginative endings or just couldn't think of one. BAH!

Crap

If you can`t write and finish a story the fuck off. Finished would have been a sure 5 stars but this useless unfinished shit gets none!!

#2 WHAT MIGHT HAPPEN

is going to happen ,,no matter what, TK U MLJ LV NV

Flash is right

And perfect -

Short sweet - the audience must - for a change - think on it's own for a change.

The blanks are all drawn and there is very little filling in to do - let's make it easy - he wins!. The details on your minds are the fun part of how well he wins lol

Too bad no sequel

I was seriously laughing over this one. Fun read and I'd love to read more about this one but still...good read.

Don't see a need for a sequel

Any sequel would just drag us through the divorce, recriminations, etc. etc.Blah, blah blah.

There's plenty of 'finished' stories out there. Use your imagination!

Good story, Good twist. Thanks for writing it.

lmfao

boom, oops, busted, done like a kipper ---nice short and to the point would love another one page just to see them burn lol

Yes

Another tale which seems to point out that cheaters are the stupidest people on the planet.

Too much!

In a very good way. I hope DD returns with more of her trademark writing style. (Very little Nazi work would have been needed.)

I know you asked us to not worry about spelling, etc.

but:
"This story is about a cleaver twist that a cuckolded man thinks of to get his pound of flesh without a carving knife."

you don't need a carving knife when you are twisting a cleaver.
lol

Enjoyable

Great imaginative twist on an overworked theme. Well done.

Gave it a 1....

Only because you didn't finishthedamnstory!

Just noticed my 10/28 faux pas.

I meant, of course, to say "...Nazi grammar..."

****

Great start but not even an ounce of flesh. He said vs. They said all within a holding cell.

While well done I don't agree that it doesn't need an ending.

I. for one, don't want to "think" about an ending. I want it spelled out for me in print. I want to see if the wife gets a smart attorney, beats the charges, has the pre-nup overturned and gets her pound of flesh. I want to follow the husband around while he plots against the wife, makes sure every person she knows gets copies of the pictures of her infidelity. I don't like to "assume". I makes an as out of you and me. BAH!

No sequel is necessary

Then you should have completed the story. If you want to write a quick flash story, make sure it tells the entire story without the reader wanting to know more about the characters and the why and where. There was something most certainly going to happen after the end of what was written but the author either didn't care to elaborate or figured the reader needed to make up their own story finish. Authors write to entertain their readers. An author who doesn't finish a story is like a magician who shows you an empty hat and then tells you to imaging a rabbit hopping out of it.