Well, this is pretty cool - the role-play and whatnot. Only one minor detail- for a brief period in the middle of the story, the main character was referred to as 'Sophie', whereas before she was 'Zoe'. Then you switch back to calling her 'Zoe'. Just proofreader and you should be a-ok. :)
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Anonymous06/08/13
Nice.
Good start to a series! We look forward to more from this delicious little slut.
by
Anonymous06/08/13
But...Kevin?
Really, I'd like to learn a little more about Kevin. And what makes this other guy an old flame?
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Brilliant!
You are pushing all of my fetish buttons here!
Awesome!
Well, this is pretty cool - the role-play and whatnot. Only one minor detail- for a brief period in the middle of the story, the main character was referred to as 'Sophie', whereas before she was 'Zoe'. Then you switch back to calling her 'Zoe'. Just proofreader and you should be a-ok. :)
Nice.
Good start to a series! We look forward to more from this delicious little slut.
But...Kevin?
Really, I'd like to learn a little more about Kevin. And what makes this other guy an old flame?
More, please!
Great start
Dying to know what happens next. Next chapter soon please
Response
I might explore Kevin in another story. But he won't feature any further in this sequence: sorry!
We'll meet Zoe's 'Old Flame' (who is of course the guy on the other end of the text messages) in, I think, Chapter 4.
Thank you all for your comments, votes and feedback xx
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