All Comments on 'FAWC 1: Comfort Zone'

The plot didn't work for me, I'm afraid, sorry. Combined with weak characterisation, numerous errors and clunky dialogue, I struggled to finish it.

but in this case, shifting away from the werewolf plot to a psycho to a crazy author was too jarring. A few too many twists made it unravel.

Nice effort, but I get tired of the "story within a story" idea.

but the execution didn't hold up. The story within the story was cumbersome and the obvious errors ('taught skirt', 'emergency break') jarred me out of the story, even out of the sex. :(

As others have said, the writer needs to keep trying.

Unlike the previous commenters, I enjoyed this story. The suspense was built up nicely and the reader was kept guessing to the very end. Good job!

I LOVED this story! The writer's block/writer intensity scenes near the beginning worked for me. I liked how it was interwoven. Fun and dark. Deserving of five stars!

This story was submitted by RedMonkeyButt. Well done, Red!

A few spelling errors I noticed which means there were several I missed as I do not normally see them at first. Your heroine was well done and the story very well done. But please remember a handgun only works if you tell the story to the dead victim of the shooting. Bad guys can be very fast and amature shooters somewhat slow. But all in all a very good story that got 5 stars

Really loved this story and the twist at the end.

Wait...so by the end scene, was Dax an impostor all along? Or just when she got into bed and slept with that man?

And the end scene, did the other gunshot mean the other psycho was shot by Dax? Or what :/....other than that it was awesome...just need help to end it!