All Comments on 'Controlling Bobbi Ch. 01: Bobbi'

That's it? Too little, even for just a start...

Your story ended before even going anywhere for the most part. You hint at things but it is so short it left me thinking you did not post it all or at least the rest of chapter 1.

I really liked the concept and hope you continue from Bobbi's point of view. I agree with the others about the length. A little more detail and a longer chapter would be nice but still have you 5 stars for a good start to a good idea.

Please continue!

I have never just given 2 stars but Im tired of these all too short opening chapters, They go no place and end the same way. I hate reading 1 pg a day for a week to finally enjoy parts of it. do 2-3 pages and then submit it thats only I believe 6-10,000 words.

I have to agree with the others, I'm sick and tired of these short teaser one page chapters. Sit down and work it out than leave it at a good place.

I started reading this story thought that the concept seemed good but the ending seemed to just fall of a cliff... Where is this story going after this short chapter???

I understand the comments about length. It won't matter when all the chapters are up on the site, but I can see your frustration now. I originally planned each instalment to be from either Ryan's or Bobbi's perspective, but I think in future I will give both perspectives in the same story. That should fill in the blanks for the readers as the stories are posted.

There's a lot of loose ends to tie up, even a chance to make the geek seem desirable, if you want.

This is an excellent start to an interesting premise. I hope she enjoys the ride as much as we readers do. 4 stars for the first chapter. I hope the star count goes up with each additional chapter.

YOMEYO

Read a bit, thought it couldn't be worse, then it ended and I thought it might get better so off to the next.