I've Been Set Up Ch. 04

Been A While But...

It has been a while for this story then this piece of SHIT! One star and I have removed the other stories in this series.

awful

The drop in quality from the first 3 chapters is just mind blowing. I never though I'd be marking a Many Feathers story a 1 :-(

Just awful

Where did this chapter come from . Must be on loan from another wannabe author because it sure doesn't read like a Many Feathers story anymore . Really disappointed

Welcome Back

hope things are alot better

WHY is it

The ones with the CHICKEN S--T comments never sign their name?.

please write more!!!! so fucking hot!!!!

One of the best stories ever! Please write more! I had a friends mom who would walk around in a silk robe trying to catch us looking at her! She was nasty hot!

Wow dude.

Way to ruin a great story. Oh well, it's your tale to tell. Started out nice, thoughtful, original. Now? Uninteresting and forgettable. Sad, but hey, it's your story. Don't think I'll bother reading any more of yours. A big waste if we invest time in getting to know and feel for your characters only to have you turn them into unworthy, boring players. It's irritating, but I can't complain. It's still a free site....

Is there no more?

I was really getting into that scenario stuff. I know you usually get pizza boy/girl seductions in bad pornos but in this instance the characters and their experiences, especially Jake's novicehood, are what I, as a reader and as a man, want to experience. So I sincerely hope there's another chapter in the offing.
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Never continue

Pure stupidity.

SAD!!

The first 3 chapters were fine. A nice little story.

You lost me with this one.

Does this continue?

OK, the fourth chapter is a departure from the general story, which is a pity, but it is not really dreadfull. I would like to see a continuation of this. Does Jake do Carla?, do they all end up living together? Etc.

..And though I was a little nervous about being the one to officially deflower my niece, I was also really looking forward to it.

@@@ whats to be nervous about? You're not deflowering her. You're not doing shit, just laying there on your back. She might as well have just gotten a dildo with a suction cup on it and slapped it down on the kitchen floor and taken her cherry that way. Really, whats the point of having the guy there if he isnt going to actually take your virginity? Seems kinda, I dunno... I wouldn't want it to be me just laying there and not actually be on top, pushing in, holding her, whispering to her while I kiss and lick her... @@@

Wouldn't you like to touch this?" She asked, slowly gliding a finger through her juicy slit before reaching up, sucking her finger off as she stood there.

@@@ They're actually kinda pretty slutty, lol. I think its more of a turn-off to me, as the guy they're fucking (at least this week) that they'll let random guys see them naked and feel them up. Then theres mondays. How many guys has Darla *really* fucked? She says one, but by listening to their conversation about her and mom on mondays earlier it makes you wonder. Might make you paranoid about actually sticking your dick in her:/ @@@


....ok, yeah, the whole bringing others in thats going on in this chapter is a total turnoff. ...and honestly from his perspective, I think Id be less interested if fooling around with the three of them, that just does nothing for me as a guy except turn me off.

meh

was a great story unitl you added the mail man and pizza boy. now I am sorry i waisted my time.

Chapter 5 ???

Not cool ! Not cool at all ! I'm sitting here boner in hand waiting for the pizza girl and warm no more story ! That is not even close to cool !