All Comments on 'Ode to the shitter (a tavvy tale)'

This is a factual story put into rhyme.

Typo last line should be "at"not "and"

the central idea is excellent, a little more curing and the poem would have been exceptional, don't rush these things, very nice descriptive action of group effort, a little more detail on shitter's transition from vanquished to victor is merited (before he lets loose)

Feedback seems to be about the only thing really lacking here.

I have spoken to the other four gentlemen that were involved in this incident and many others, we are going to have a brainstorming session, involving coronas and a few tequilas to get some more ideas. I am thinking a multi part series, six years of some of the strangest human behaviour that I think needs to be documented for everyones reading amusement, if not then just for mine.