Daddy's Sweet Surprise

REALLY HOTTT BEGINNING..PLEASE CONTINUE..ESPECIALLY THE STUD BI ACTION

GREAT BEGINNING..ESPECIALLY THE TOTAL FAMILY ACTION INCLUDING HOT MUSCLED STUD BI ACTION..IS MOM STILL A PART OF THIS FAMILY?? IF SO..GET HER INVOLVED WITH BOTH DAD AND CHRIS..ESPECIALLY WITH THE GUYS BI ACTION WITH MOM BEING THE RECIPIENT OF THE STUD CREMEPIES..FROM HER GUYS BUTTS... HOTTT AND DON'T LET THE IDIOTIC ..MINDLESS CRITICS STEER YOU AWAY FROM THE MALE BI ACTION..NOTHING HOTTER IN FAMILY FUN..THAN TOTAL BI FUN.. WE KNOW...

Not bad for a first time story!

This story is a fantasy of mine, a real turn on. I felt that this story could have gone into a bit more depth and detail. Not bad for your first story. Please could you do some other story's along the same lines and ill keep reading them :-)

In all sincerity and respect, please stop writing.

needs a bit of work

Your story started off great, and I know its just a fantasy story.. but in all honesty, wouldn't your main character turn around when something was nudging her pussy? Or at least see who or what it was? Then you could use that for better dialog before turning it into a all out family orgy. Also, a little bit more explanation is needed before the Dad can just start wailing away on his daughter. Something more like "God, daughter you are just so beautiful... blah blah.. I just can't help but want to taste you.." or in the daughter's case " Daddy... I have had a secret crush on you.." or whatever.. It makes it easier to understand, thats all. But otherwise it's a good start of a story. Just work on adding a bit more dialog, and draw out some of the sex scenes with more details. ^_^

I dream of this

I have a beautiful daughter and three boys, I would love to fuck my daughter and suck each one of my boys cocks, if they are like me they all should have nice long cocks to play with, and my daughter is just a lovely lady that looks nothing like her mother thank goodness. I would love to have my boys fuck my ass its been such a long time since I have had a cock in there, just my 12 inch dildo that I sit on and ride. Would like to chat use da.cd@frontier.com