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too short
glad too see next chapter through
What happened between this chapter and the first?
The writing was fine but there are story development problems. There's a gaping hole between chapter 1 and 2. All of a sudden they're on a deserted island alone? That's fine but how were they completely separated from the other people?
Keep writing.
Not what i expected
I assumed it'd be better, but now i'm confused why they got bad attitudes with one another. hmph..yeah o.o .> i'm done.
5stars!!!
Love it! Great story/concept, but the chapters too short. Add more, but make the next chapter longer, please :)😃
These two are comical. He has his manly pride but he need to get over it. He is going to need her just as much as he is going to need him to survive.
Small Spelling Error
It is Johns Hopkins, not John Hopkin's.
I like your story
I think that the short chapters are keeping you from developing the story. You went from Amar rescuing Jasmine to Amar waking up on desert island two days later. Details make the story better!!
Loving it!! GREAT!!
Great job thus far! I am really looking forward to the continuation of this story!! Soooooooooooo much potential. I am loving it!! Keep up the good writing.. Don't take too long to give updates but don't rush the writing either. I'm looking forward to your character development and the interaction between Jasmine and Amar on the island... hopefully they don't stay there forever.. Just keep writing because I will be reading.. Cheers***
Great
Hope to read more!
Why is he acting like an ASS?
What is he a "f"ing bigot or something?
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