Somali Girls For Hispanic Boyz

So Realistic

That was good, you should turn it into a series. More sex ;)

Your main character is a bitch, annoying, and unlikeable.

No dialogue

The story needs dialogue

The story sucked ass

Why is it that your entire collection of dribble as a whole stinks to high heaven. You are a talentless writer. Reading your baggage is like watching Paula Deen cook authentic french cuisine (it ain't gonna happen). Quantity doesn't mean quality. For the life of me I can't grasp any reason for encouragement. Find another hobby, writing is not your forte mate.

relatable...

Up until the last paragraph you put what actually matters no one cares about her family life or religion. That doesn't matter, no dialogue AT ALL and then more pointless info...ALL OF YOUR STORIES ARE LIKE THAT. Its like reading a fucking history book then erotica afterwards..when we are already bored with the beginning.

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damn gurl