The Ritual

Wish I hadn't read this. Their sacrifice was for nothing.

Awful. Try a little karma idiot

They should have been honored for thir sacrifice. I'd call this a horror story. Now I'm depressed.

Stupid

Terrible story. Poorly written and it in no way was erotic.

I now know everything I care to know about the author.

Yuck. Don't waste your time on this drivel.

Misogynistic drivel

Don't bother to read this nasty misogynistic drivel. Quite frankly I am struggling to understand why anyone would bother to write it in the first place.

Wow, nice moral to the story. The only way their kingdom can survive and empower itself is by horribly mistreating and abusing it's most beloved women, so badly that they can't even continue their own bloodline, and so often they become wicked monsters themselves? With thinking like that, sounds like they became the enemy instead of defeating it.

WTH?

What a butch of sexist crap combined with bad writing and as sexy as fucking in raw fish guts.

Sorry but I am no pro

This was my first attempt and well it was extreme and pathetic. I agree. I also apologize to others who read the story. I don't know how to delete the work or else I would have done so. Thank you and sorry anyway.

I liked it. A grim, bondage fairy tale. The story line was clear and text is easy to read. In my opinion - well done.

I've read worse - trust me it's out there.

Read the whole thing, if it were total crap I wouldn't have. Interesting plot.... unusual mode of solution. Rushed ending. Might want to get in your characters' heads a bit more so we can relate to them, understand their true natures. Would have seen the end coming if I had known the king was so selfish. I thought that such a profound sacrifice would have had a more, hmmm... lasting positive outcome but the irony was thick enough to walk on. I love irony. Keep working at it... it's salvageable- as so many on here aren't.
~ Sanguine.

Ok there's no need to apologize there most definitely is worse that has been written. Besides too many people act like they're paying for the story, what right does anybody have to be mad about something they could have very well avoided? And honestly what did you guys expect out of a website where you read free PORN?? This story had a plot that was pretty unbelievable but it wasn't unreadable by any means. You have potential, and if you ever try writing again, then you probably will be able to do better.
FYI: there's a difference between constructive criticism and just being plain rude