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by Magnetron04/04/14

" always on a knives edge of ignition"

Everything seems to work well to me with the exception of this line.

I would go with something other than knives that could actually create a spark and keep in within the theme. Like perhaps, flint.

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by HarryHill04/07/14

I like knife

but I think ...of splitting may work better or spilling
...will douse >douses
good job :)

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