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Very nice
Love your writing style. Good story.
Great story
I really enjoyed it, can't wait for the next installment.
A very fine tale.
Thank you.
Love it!
Can't wait for the next installment! Great writing!
Very good
I liked this and hope Marybeth keeps writing. Cant wait
An easy read.
This is a light and entertaining work. The reader can enjoy a few minutes without having to invest time or emotion into the story. The dialogue flowed well and was never confusing. Thanks for writing.
MaryBeth
Just finished reading about Marybeth and loved it. I am also an exhibitionist and love reading about them, and their first feeling about flashing. would love to tell you about some of my exploits if you are interested.
Yet another Bravo!
A well thought out story that develops perfectly to seem so real! A very good read that is nearly impossible to put down!
WOW
Bloody Fantastic. You have done it again. THANK YOU VERY MUCH.
Creative Story
I found the approach really clever and actually actors often do use this method in their pursuit of insight into a character. So you have captured that for erotica and it really works. I think it could be used to write stories or more chapters of how the main character writes more novels. I thought jumping so quickly into sex with this guy was off the topic of exhibitionism and that part did not flow as well. There are many venues for exhibitionism, which I think is a more complex line for erotica and less common that basic sex. That is my experience as a writer for what it is worth. I want to encourage you to keep writing along this line, as it is different and it opens the door to many stories! Nice idea as well. newenglander11 at out look dot com
Really like your approach
This was a great way to work into the situation.. Maybe more flashing before the sex next time....
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