Fuck Abercrombie & Fitch Ch. 03

Odder and Odder

Bull Mark was getting TOO MUCH pleasure out of humiliating Hubby, possibly more pleasure than he was getting from Sweetie. WHY would he invite him to a party except to shit on Hubby in public! Instead, he gives Hubby a surrogate in Vixen Carmen! Mark already has Wingman Barry established with Sweetie, he doesn't need to redefine Hubby, such as for DP duties!

I see this as a fundamental (and additional) drift in an established character's personality...not a good thing in a short story! Bad enough that Hubby has become massively indecisive and sometimes delusional!

Question?

Don't you have to be married to have a Loving Wife? Just poorly written story for Erotic Couplings. There is obviously no commitment between Jess and the boyfriend. More like Friends with Benefits. Odd story

at least

everybody understands why you are single. keep it that way, it's the best for everybody.

you and lickideesplit should get together

he would bore people to death and you could make them sick. The story was terrible from the content to the author.

finding out the shes a slut

think they should have a long talk about what happened and he needs to tell her how he knows about her sucking & fucking the other guys. As they aren't married yet he still has time to say bye. As for him doing the other girl thats a maybe. So lets have the next part

Why?

Why continue to write?

@Kara

Why continue? Your point is made. Move on to other stories.

You obviously just get off on making your readers angry

So fuck you!

Man hater

This is obviously a shot at normal men who love their women and who value fidelity. Perhaps the author has made bad choices in the past and wants to share the pain. Whatever the case may be, no normal man would put up with this behavior. Jess is not, and never will be wife material. She is not worth a mans love. She is an immature slut, that has devalued herself.

still a wimp

and I think I'm gonna be sick...

No wife in this at all.

So why is it posted in Loving Wives? This could go in Erotic Couplings or Group. But not here. It would seem to me that the one, basic, can't get around it requirement of the Loving Wives genre would be a wife...

This is obviously written by a cheating slut that enjoys humiliating her BOYFRIEND, there is no wife here, post it in the right section, but then thats Lit lately, they don't give a fuck if a story fits the THEIR rules and guidelines,

win her back?????

Kick her ass to the curb. There is no way she loves him. A two girl blow job doesn't make them even close to even. I have read a couple of your stories. I think you probably be an inferiority complex to men.

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Negativity

Ignore the negative comments and keep writing. Might be a good idea to use a different category but otherwise keep on rolling :-)

But Why

Why would a person continue with a significant other that habitually cheated? It is beyond understand.....just cut your losses and move on!

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When Spongeform likes it your totally screwed. Really a terrible story written very poorly. But he is correct you gotta get out of this section fast. Your the running joke on the blog since chapter one!! BTW this site has been hacked and your IP is available to those in the know. I know as it happened to a friend of mine. Becareful in this section

y would anyone want a girlfriend like this ,I think cuckolds r gay or bi no real man would put up with this shite

WIN ending to this part!

GREAT ending to this part did not see that coming, love that he gets some and it isnt him just getting beat down the whole time. Cuck is hot but it gets sad and monotonous after a while, love that he gets inducted a bit and gets some play!

Save it

To save this voyeur tale you'll have to actually create dialog between him and the slut. Why'd she do it... Repetatively, why does he watch... Cats out of the bag with everyone. Screwing everyone at the asshole bosses party. If u dont deal with the issues youre no better a writer than daytime soaps.

Keep At It!

This story arc has been awesome so far. Don't listen to the naysayers. I would love to see how this all ends, and I really enjoy the development of the main character.

One more!

I know it's a three part series, but please add just a little more, it's great so far!

At least one more

This is great so far. Keep to it.

More Please

I like the way the guys are complimenting him but really laughing at him.

MOAR!

I know a lot of people have freaked out about these stories (yet seem to keep reading them?). Ignore the haters. They love feeling outraged at fiction. I want to read more of this dude getting all twisted up and turned on.

Hey

You should totally do this story again from Jess' perspective!

More!

Please?

Not just bad

Epically bad. Redundant. Unoriginal. Unbelievable.

Love This Series

You seriously need to write more. I loved parts one and two of this series more than this part but, as a whole, this series is fantastic. If I were to offer some advice, I would tell you to try to go into greater detail in some parts. In part 2 you went from, "Not on her face" to "She ran to the back to clean up" without describing anything about the act.

Please please write more!

I liked these and Adriana. I think the negative comments are from people shit scared that their wife or girlfriend might do something similar. Missing the point of fantasy a little :)

Loved it!

I loved it! You haven't abandoned it, I hope?

other side

I really want to see these 3 chapters from jess's point of view.

Ha

It's an idiotic little story, but for some reason I find it amusing. The characters are all cheerful morons.

NO ONE TO BLAME

except yourself. TK U MLJ LV NV