by Columbina
I like this because it does sound - evocative. I'm a little confused about what it is invoking, however, and by labels like the sisters of the dawn and "blood letters"?. It sounds cool, but I don't quite grasp it. The final (muses) also confuses me. I still like it though. I may chant it tonight and see what happens.
If this is Via Negativa, it's pretty good. If it isn't, I don't know what you mean.
you relook at this and do a hearty rewrite
There is catharsis in pain
gnosis in joy
grabber, but what are you doing? Is it supposed to be
There is catharsis in pain, (comma?)
gnosis in joy
or is the line supposed to mean
There is catharsis in pain and gnosis in the joy (of the catharsis)
toss this:
Feel their ache in
the cornerstone of your soul.
this is a dead kitten
reason I say these things, it is worthy of rewriting
5ed, despite a wince or two
visionalize and float with zephyrs, TK U MLJ LV NV