In a sequel they all get AIDS and pass away in agony.
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Anonymous06/30/13
This would have been more interesting...
if it had included a scene the next day in which he confronted the wife. She obviously didn't have a legitimate excuse for doing all this without discussing it with him in advance, even if he made some vague remark once. The fact that she scheduled this for a time that she knew he essentially wouldn't be able to attend clearly indicates that she knew he wouldn't go along with it. By the time he got back it would be too late to object. Therefore, it was deliberate cheating on her part. If you write a sequel, I hope you will have him read the wife the "riot act", and at least make her be his sex slave for a time to make it up to him. Regarding his "harem", why would he want Dorthea? As described, she had no sex appeal at all.
by
Anonymous06/30/13
There is always another dick
She could fuck 24/7 and still not get every dick or even a small fraction.
She can lose any and all respect that people had for her, wait she already did.
Most of the guys now only see her as a cunt, ass,tits and a mouth not a person.
Husband has hopefully realized the marriage is over and is moving on.
Anybody who holds somebody to what they say during sex most likely manipulated the conversation to get those words.
This does not spontaneously spring up. It had to start slower and build over a few months. So she has been cheating on him for quit a while. She just had to manipulate him in to excepting the role of WACC. Dump her ass now. Don't worry about her she most likely is the office whore already and has been servicing every client that old Nathan brought in.
Unbelievable, immaturely written and with no real story line. Why is it that everyone who can read an erotic story thinks they can write one?
by
Anonymous06/30/13
Open marriages and orgies like this seem more suited to Group Sex than to Loving Wives - he apparently doesn't seem to have a problem with fucking every woman in the room or with his wife getting gangbanged even though she railroaded him into it.
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Anonymous06/30/13
dimwit
there was a normal marriage and she organized an orgy ?
she was a whore before or working in a brothel (a party for work mates)
But the story feels very compressed. Too much happens too fast. You should have made the plot simpler or the story longer. As it is, you cant really identify with any of the characters.
At least two ANONS got it right (i.e. I agree with them!) It's not bad, and Hubby needs to learn to LISTEN to Sweetie ESPECIALLY when he is being distracted by her! Did he learn nothing from living around his Mother?
Hey folks - it is FICTION, and the TITLE tells us it is tongue-in-cheek (oops...pun not originally intended!) Sweetie asked him about it, and verified it the next morning, then notified Hubby about the party! Yeah, it is unlikely there are that many co-workers who will stay as a BBQ evolves into an orgy (at least the first one for this grouping of this company!) it was nice to have some less-than-perfect specimens along with the obligatory 'firehose phallus' types!
Group Sex would have been a good choice, but the central theme of this tale is Hubby being 'snookered' by his 'honest but sneaky' Sweetie. He seemed to adapt to the surprise just FINE! ALMOST a TLW story...almost!
4*
by
Anonymous06/30/13
what a shit story if you like orgys, no protection all diseases likey,
why get married and see a doctor after your orgy. hope you don't get aids. and this is a normal marriage. its pretty sick writing for me. it belongs in gang banks , whore.
by
Anonymous06/30/13
another sick story from a chucky author
he comes home expecting to find his wife, not a wife but a whore and he gets it on after figuring out what is going on. a marriage made in heaven, really not!!!! one sicko author .at least it was short..
by
Anonymous06/30/13
So bad
it's not worth a comment.
by
Anonymous06/30/13
ridiculous story
There might be a good idea in there somewhere, but wtf? The wife asks for an OK on a threesome and the husband returns from a trip to find an orgy happening in his house. He blinks and joins in.
As written, it's worthless. You've got to give more motivation, you've got to give reasons for actions, and a horny wife isn't good enough. There has to be characterization, a followup. There isn't and as a result the story is flat, dead.
by
Anonymous06/30/13
Well at least he got some for himself
Most willing cuck stories are unequal for the hubby and are just humiliation!
I think the idea of the story has potential for a sex charged, cheating spouse, deception, moral dilemma, humiliation !
There was development of the characters, reasons, motives, situation building for the story.
The husband mentioned that his wife may have strade in the pasted. This one should have his alarm bells ringing.
The moral of this story is communication break down. Need to pay attention to what one is agreeing to !
and his "Film/Fluff" story and I was NOT impressed. I was ready to move on to a different author, but decided to try one more. I really, really liked the seven "gobsmacked" stories and the four "Nancy" stories. The remainder that I read were hit or miss. I really enjoyed the "Fuckathon" story.
English
wow, I'm surpised you called yourself a husband
muchless a man. Cucky thru and thru. Not worth reading it muchless rating it
Move on...
...this bitch is going to give you the gift that keeps on giving real quick.
humm
This man is in a world of hurt with his woman... She is not his wife.. Dump her and do it quickly...
I HAVE A FEELING BKC21
is going to pen a sequel to this. TK U MLJ LV NV
Just another cluck story by a depraved author.
In a sequel they all get AIDS and pass away in agony.
This would have been more interesting...
if it had included a scene the next day in which he confronted the wife. She obviously didn't have a legitimate excuse for doing all this without discussing it with him in advance, even if he made some vague remark once. The fact that she scheduled this for a time that she knew he essentially wouldn't be able to attend clearly indicates that she knew he wouldn't go along with it. By the time he got back it would be too late to object. Therefore, it was deliberate cheating on her part. If you write a sequel, I hope you will have him read the wife the "riot act", and at least make her be his sex slave for a time to make it up to him. Regarding his "harem", why would he want Dorthea? As described, she had no sex appeal at all.
There is always another dick
She could fuck 24/7 and still not get every dick or even a small fraction.
She can lose any and all respect that people had for her, wait she already did.
Most of the guys now only see her as a cunt, ass,tits and a mouth not a person.
Husband has hopefully realized the marriage is over and is moving on.
Anybody who holds somebody to what they say during sex most likely manipulated the conversation to get those words.
Lets face facts here
This does not spontaneously spring up. It had to start slower and build over a few months. So she has been cheating on him for quit a while. She just had to manipulate him in to excepting the role of WACC. Dump her ass now. Don't worry about her she most likely is the office whore already and has been servicing every client that old Nathan brought in.
Terrible
Unbelievable, immaturely written and with no real story line. Why is it that everyone who can read an erotic story thinks they can write one?
Open marriages and orgies like this seem more suited to Group Sex than to Loving Wives - he apparently doesn't seem to have a problem with fucking every woman in the room or with his wife getting gangbanged even though she railroaded him into it.
dimwit
there was a normal marriage and she organized an orgy ?
she was a whore before or working in a brothel (a party for work mates)
real shit never read anything so stupid.
Thanks for the effort.
Not badly written and I love he title.
But the story feels very compressed. Too much happens too fast. You should have made the plot simpler or the story longer. As it is, you cant really identify with any of the characters.
You get thumbs up for effort tough.
ANONS win
At least two ANONS got it right (i.e. I agree with them!) It's not bad, and Hubby needs to learn to LISTEN to Sweetie ESPECIALLY when he is being distracted by her! Did he learn nothing from living around his Mother?
Hey folks - it is FICTION, and the TITLE tells us it is tongue-in-cheek (oops...pun not originally intended!) Sweetie asked him about it, and verified it the next morning, then notified Hubby about the party! Yeah, it is unlikely there are that many co-workers who will stay as a BBQ evolves into an orgy (at least the first one for this grouping of this company!) it was nice to have some less-than-perfect specimens along with the obligatory 'firehose phallus' types!
Group Sex would have been a good choice, but the central theme of this tale is Hubby being 'snookered' by his 'honest but sneaky' Sweetie. He seemed to adapt to the surprise just FINE! ALMOST a TLW story...almost!
4*
what a shit story if you like orgys, no protection all diseases likey,
why get married and see a doctor after your orgy. hope you don't get aids. and this is a normal marriage. its pretty sick writing for me. it belongs in gang banks , whore.
another sick story from a chucky author
he comes home expecting to find his wife, not a wife but a whore and he gets it on after figuring out what is going on. a marriage made in heaven, really not!!!! one sicko author .at least it was short..
So bad
it's not worth a comment.
ridiculous story
There might be a good idea in there somewhere, but wtf? The wife asks for an OK on a threesome and the husband returns from a trip to find an orgy happening in his house. He blinks and joins in.
As written, it's worthless. You've got to give more motivation, you've got to give reasons for actions, and a horny wife isn't good enough. There has to be characterization, a followup. There isn't and as a result the story is flat, dead.
Well at least he got some for himself
Most willing cuck stories are unequal for the hubby and are just humiliation!
Big Kahuna
Implies masculinity. Not really.
What happened to your balls?
Silly story from a little dude that needs a new title, Big Kahuna you are Not!
Should be in GroupSex
A lot of deceive by wife for her husband to bear.
Better off in non-erotic. Lol
Or groupsex.
Depth !
I think the idea of the story has potential for a sex charged, cheating spouse, deception, moral dilemma, humiliation !
There was development of the characters, reasons, motives, situation building for the story.
The husband mentioned that his wife may have strade in the pasted. This one should have his alarm bells ringing.
The moral of this story is communication break down. Need to pay attention to what one is agreeing to !
I read this story
and his "Film/Fluff" story and I was NOT impressed. I was ready to move on to a different author, but decided to try one more. I really, really liked the seven "gobsmacked" stories and the four "Nancy" stories. The remainder that I read were hit or miss. I really enjoyed the "Fuckathon" story.
Total shit story!
Worthless.
Not one ofyour better efforts.
Kind of a minimal cuckold story. Period.
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