You did an very good job building up your story characters but it seems to me (just my opinion) you hurried the rest of the story and ended to soon. I'll be waiting to read the next submission since you said it will be continued.
RecHiker
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Anonymous07/11/13
why Interesting plot ?
its so full of cliche that the story is already written.
Becky does not believe in her guy and instead of talking and developping with him , she fucks up with the loudmouth Kyle.
End of story. the details who gives a shit and for sure it will be the ever so boring story.
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Interesting plot
You did an very good job building up your story characters but it seems to me (just my opinion) you hurried the rest of the story and ended to soon. I'll be waiting to read the next submission since you said it will be continued.
RecHiker
why Interesting plot ?
its so full of cliche that the story is already written.
Becky does not believe in her guy and instead of talking and developping with him , she fucks up with the loudmouth Kyle.
End of story. the details who gives a shit and for sure it will be the ever so boring story.
Excellent build up
Great story
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