by TexRiffraff
that was very, very hot. Very sexy girls but never over the top. More of their adventures please.
I really enjoyed your story and the way you write. Would like to see the next installment involving these four girls soon.
Thankyou for sharing this lovely story. I hope you will tell us more.
RecHiker
Really good - well paced, erotic without going over the top and with well developed plotting and characters.
Only bit of constructive feedback I can think of is to add some description of the other girls - the main character is described, but I don't think anything is given to make the other characters visually distinctive. Wouldn't have to be much - just something to give the reader an idea of what they look like.
Keep up the good work!
Great, great story. Almost like reading a detailed diary entry. No reason not to believe it happened just as told.
I really enjoyed this story and it was well written too. The final girl-girl scene was the icing on the cake.