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Rain Fell In the Shopping Mall!

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by Anonymous

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by todski2807/03/13

I got no idea what you are talking about

however the flow of the piece was so good, I finished befor I started. I enjoyed it

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by twelveoone07/04/13

What a nightmare

loved it
a dystopian poem, so dysfunctional, unsure if you are pressing it a bit too much.
Rain Fell In The Shopping Mall is a wonderfull off putting image
and this takes it to the limit, mirrors the artificial
before smiling for an insincere bashful second
with spookily sharp, Splenda-whitened teeth.

but this seems to tend to word salad
which rocketed the karma-fields considerably
reason?
5ed

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