very erotic! would like to see more action of this kind!
short but damn scorching!
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Anonymous07/12/07
Disappointingly under played
The set up looked good but the author failed to deliver any real pay-off. For this story to be entertaining it needs the characters' motives and histories to be be greatly expanded.
Why did the characters act as they did? Especially the husband? Was he into being cuckolded? Or was there a deeper reason for his lack of sexual attention to his wife?
Has Mari reached a fever pitch of frustration?
Could there be anything more to the two Pastor's relationship?
How will Mari cope with her infidelity?
I hope these comments do not seem a nag. You set up a great situation, so, PLEASE, go on to exploit it!
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hot!
very erotic! would like to see more action of this kind!
short but damn scorching!
Disappointingly under played
The set up looked good but the author failed to deliver any real pay-off. For this story to be entertaining it needs the characters' motives and histories to be be greatly expanded.
Why did the characters act as they did? Especially the husband? Was he into being cuckolded? Or was there a deeper reason for his lack of sexual attention to his wife?
Has Mari reached a fever pitch of frustration?
Could there be anything more to the two Pastor's relationship?
How will Mari cope with her infidelity?
I hope these comments do not seem a nag. You set up a great situation, so, PLEASE, go on to exploit it!
A little longer.
A little more build-up would have been nice, but nice story otherwise!
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