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You gotta be kidding..
No body could post such garbage and mean it seriously. If meant as a serious post, author needs to run (not walk) to see a psychologist.
brilliant
Anon wouldn't recognize good writing if it was printed on his backside. Great piece of prose, and very erotic. The easiest 5 stars for some time.
Ignore the other Anon
Erotic, classy and distinguished by very good writing. I particularly liked the "I couldn't love you any more" device.
More
HOT!! Keep'em cumming :-) Thanks.
nice..
well written and erotic,if this is your first submission then well done, more please.
And...
Can't wait to hear where you take this, you lucky devil.
One of the hottest pieces of erotica written and posted recently. A nice build up that was slow but moving. He is a lucky, lucky character.
A future
Hall of Famer for sure.
Really hot, clever and well-written
I rarely read LW stories for the erotic content (I know, weird, right?), but rather for romance, drama, etc. However, this was the kind of LW erotica that I can get behind. really well done. 5 stars all day. Was a realistic fantasy.
My only quibble was with the first paragraph. I get it, it was 'literally' a brutal year. What would a 'figuratively' brutal year be like, exactly? For a clean, streamlined story, that was a clumsy way to begin, and it really added nothing, except to draw the narrator's qualifications as an English teacher into question. Everything that followed completely redeemed it, however.
That noise you're hearing; that's applause.
Very well done!
Excellent
Happy horny tale. No one was injured.
Ha
Aww
As if you leave it at that!
New Yorker Magazine Quality
Clever, humorous, witty, erotic; built a good story line and cinched it at the end!
Hopefully you don't wait until the next school year is out to write the sequel!!
I'm in lust with your wife!!
Nice one
Great story, gets you hot without getting dirty.
Amazing
The entire BTB brigade came out in force to, rightly, praise the high quality of writing in this light story. The lesbian implication at the end does not cause a ripple. BUT, if the wife had walked hand in hand with a naked man to her husband, she would be a cheating slut whore deserving to be beheaded and her wimp submissive queer husband would be spared of course, but sneered at. And the author would be hated.
Outstanding!!
A good tale that had the right mix. It was left as it should have been. Let the imaginations take over from there....unless you part 2 in mind.
The parentheses got on my nerves a bit but other than that it was a well written story. It's nice to read about a husband and wife having fun without some Jamaican who is 3 times the size of hubby. 5*
Great story
I love this story. It's well written and a perfect combination of romance and eroticism.
Hot
now it's time to make it hotter. Take it on to arriving with Felicity and her boyfriend back at the room, and see if they can really 'love each other more'
Author, Author!!
Bravo, an excellent tale, and well told to boot. Good, crisp writing, excellent grammar, punctuation and pretty good spelling (btw, Duval Street is spelled with only one "l"). Most memorable part of the story? "I couldn't possibly love you more, than I do right now..." "Wanna bet?"
This one gets an "A" the old fashioned way...you earned it!
@ Amazing
Fair point, but do note that "Felicity" had a boyfriend there, too, who presumably wouldn't get shut out of the post-bar action.
If Only...
...there were a few more Mirandas at the Garden of Eden!!!
I loved this story and loved it being set in Key West, where you can be both nude and naked and have the time of your life. Good stuff.
Gotta love Duval St
A excellent story. You did a great job of describing two people who want to enjoy each other and life to the fullest.
Now I am even more excited about our next trip to KW. Unfortunately, The Garden of Eden is more like your opening description, a bunch of out of shape old guys hoping to see a hottie. It really is boring.
Thanks for writing.
Will neither...
confirm or deny any facts in this story, including knowledge that the Garden of Eden exists on the corner of Duval and Caroline.
That said, all money made on these stories goes right into a travel fund. So, please vote... and maybe there WILL be another Miranda visit to Garden of Eden.
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