Black Fantasy Fulfilled Three Times

tense

try using the first person tense....it's much easier to follow....otherwise..as good story...keep going

Enthusiasm

I like your enthusiasm but suggest you have an editor look over any future stories first because I think you were so excited you got sloppy in more ways than the obvious. There are countless sentences that seem to be missing a word or two or where the tense changes in mid-stream, making it a difficult read. There are also many run-on sentences that sound like somebody trying to tell a story without taking a breath.

Swimsuit instead of swim suite/ without instead of with out/slid instead of slide/forever instead of for ever, just for spelling starters. Dialogue always needs quotation marks to set it apart from the story.

I don't say any of this trying to be mean, and there will be people telling you to ignore comments like this and just keep writing. They aren't doing you any favors. If you don't want to get an editor there is another way to improve. Read the story aloud to your partner. Read it just the way you wrote it and many of the problems will become obvious to you. Here's an example of one of your sentences:

"As the first one pulled out the next mounted me and since I was loosened up he began to pump wildly and like the first it felt great I was cumming constantly wave after wave after what seemed like for ever he began to pump his cum in my pussy."

See? That's a paragraph in need of a couple of commas at least and maybe a period as well. I wish you well in future efforts.

HOT

needs some English correction for sure , bur it sounds true and I have experienced a similar situation and I do love black cock I only had two
in my wild time with them and I love to see them every time I can now
so hot

NICE

my wife and I had the same fantasy and we live it out now just like
this woman and we really like it, when she meets alone with her black bulls she allways calls and tell me and take pic and fills me in when she gets to see me so hot and I love to be with her also and help satisfy our black bulls

Don't pay any attention to the haters at all. Please keep telling us about your experiences with BBC. Most of us are very interested.

yes

yes tell lus more good story , turned me on

Thank you

I have read the comments and glad most of you liked what I shared. The story is true and will write more when I have time. I will try to do a better job at writing the next one.

Our Humanity at it's best, it is to our reproduction of our species, all pussy ajust to all cock sizeyes the bigger for anny women as it's stretch the bigger orgasms,.

very well scrip, yes it has become in north America the ultimate fantasies of sexual & orgys of our time,. the best of the best

very well done you got your point across keep writing I think every story will get better

Great stories

I love both your stories. I love this and enjoyed jerking off to them keep on writing more of your true stories

HotWildCat, keep writing!! Don't let the racist, hateful wimp who posts "Anonymouse", LOL, stop you!!

great story

You are very strong.
I am a white man. Black men do a much better job in appreciating white women.
Keep up your great writing !

The best

As a married white boy I honestly believe that Black men are Superior in the bedroom. We white boys simply can't compete. Love your stories. I'd lie to read that a muscular Black man forces hubby to watch and luck up his cum.

Wife with black cock

My wife loves a black cock. She works in a store run by black lads and each one as her each week and some times four times a day her pussy. Is always dripping with cum when she gets home I get sloppy 5ths most days. She says they have at least 12inches each one of them. And she won't stop having them all.

Your right!!

Being a black man, single (never married), tall - 6'7", in shape business owner, I have made it my life's quest to make white women very, very happy. So far at age 38 I can honestly say I must be doing something right as they continue to come back for more. Single, married, engaged, separated even widowed cannot get enough of my 10" black cock! No wonder my nick name in college was "meat whistle".

There are no other means for maximum stretching of a women's pussy than the bigest cocks possible as nature is well balance to reproduce our species a cock that penetrate & open the cevix & enter the Uterus wile the orgasms explode i

A VERY DETAIL THAT EXPRESS THE REALITY OF OUR HUMANITY FOR ALL OUR REPRODUCTIVE ORGANDS,.

Black

As a married white male I have no idea why but I dream of my little white wife taking a huge black cock. She is five feet tall with long blonde hair and at 47 still turns heads. When I married her I would have never dreamt of sharing her, but now it's all I dream of. Especially with a well hung black guy. I would love to have her come home one day and she tells me a story like this.

incredible story!

a little light on details but hot none the less! Thank you and keep the stories coming!
Cheers!

I would loooooooooooooooooooooove to read more stories!

I think every white woman should experience a big black juicy dick!

3 X 5 = 15 ?

Or more ! What a wonderful fantasy you've put in my head, and p.... !

Good story

I liked your story line but you are in desperate need of an editor. Keep writing

LOL

if your ways of spicing things up in the bedroom include bringing in other people then your doing it wrong

Good the second time

This story is still good the second time around. This gal needs to go off of birth control then get herself bred black not once but twice as all white girls/women should do.