could use more chapters
Personally, I'd prefer a little more build up. By the way, I think you meant "epilogue," not "prologue."
We are keen reading more about Lisbeth.
Became a tad shallow by the halfway mark.
... the help of a good proof-reader and a good Editor. Far too many silly errors!!
too rushed
I mean, really - Who says that a Prologue has to come BEFORE the story? How passe'! When you write the next installment (and I hope you will), perhaps you could preface it with an Epilogue! :D
Did need one more edit, however. Can't wait for the next installment.
Very entertaining. Thanks for sharing.
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great story
could use more chapters
Needs a little more buildup
Personally, I'd prefer a little more build up.
By the way, I think you meant "epilogue," not "prologue."
Nice story!
We are keen reading more about Lisbeth.
Good start
Became a tad shallow by the halfway mark.
It could also use ...
... the help of a good proof-reader and a good Editor.
Far too many silly errors!!
too rushed
Conventions are so...conventional
I mean, really - Who says that a Prologue has to come BEFORE the story? How passe'!
When you write the next installment (and I hope you will), perhaps you could preface it with an Epilogue!
:D
Excellent story.
Did need one more edit, however. Can't wait for the next installment.
Good Read****
Very entertaining. Thanks for sharing.
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