Castaway Ch. 05

Interesting change of events!!

Hot

But still difficult to read with the so many small errors. But still, I'm enjoying it.

Amar still will be an asshole tomorrow. He need to let go and tell Jasmine why he is acting the way he is. Hiding his emotions is hurting him and everyone he pushes away.

Amar was all of that necessary?

That was sexy!! NOw that Bianca broke Luis off a piece maybe he'll leave Jasmine alone? So good, still wishing for chapters longer than 1 or 2 chapters.

Edits needed....

I stopped reading when I saw..."...some small island just west of Florida near the Bahamas..." the Bahamas is east of Florida and I would know because I live there. West of Florida? I think your island would be in the gulf of Mex? Missed errors like this by writers are often the things that annoy and turn off readers. Good luck.

YOU ARE A TEASE.

What why you stop just when it was getting good.

Not gonna lie, I was anticipating the hook up between Amar & Jaz, but this chapter just felt rushed, so I'm a little disappointed.

This story is improving

Amar is still a jerk and quickly becoming unredeemable.

Wasn't Luis just up in Jasmine's face?

There are grammatical and spelling errors. The writing is improving but you may want to find an editor. Until you find an editor, try reading your stories from the bottom up. You're more likely to catch errors this way.

Important Update about Castaway series

Hello Everyone, i have been extremely busy with school and work, but i have finally finished chapter 6. I have spent a lot of time on it so it is longer. more importantly though I have gone through and edited the past 5 chapters and will be reposting those as well. I have made some changed to the story, but it will be the same story line.
Thanks for your support.