by todski28
even if the ending is a bit hokey, but by dint of writing every day you're steadily improving. :-)
You are getting much, much better. I like the ending - I didn't see it coming!
To all
Hokey Angeline? Did you smile or laugh? If you did then this poem has served its purpose. Not everything in life has to be so serious, forms, metre, rhyme etc are amazing things but something as simple as a grin at cheeky word play is a point that life can't always be so serious.
in the sense of the build up and misdirection leads to a mere fizz,
i.e. overdone
but damn
you got this misdirection crap down to a "T"
i 5ed btw