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by Angeline07/06/13

Great read

I especially like the last four sets of lines. "false tears/urban raindrops" is wonderful. Thank you for sharing it.

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by Ashesh907/06/13

Outstandin'ly

Lonely !!

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by twelveoone07/07/13

what she said

not quite what he said
and
l 5and 6 contrast nicely with 3 and 4
5ed

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by greenmountaineer07/07/13

One of the best erotic poems I've read in a long time. The narrative had a dream-like quality to it, and then, voilá, it was a dream. Liked the "anti-climax" of the absent cricket at the end. Line breaks and syntax were great.

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