The very first word - "You" - is, to me, a signal that the story will be totally unbelievable and therefore complete rubbish!
I KNOW that I was not a participant and so that destroys any semblance or possibility of believability, without which the story is a complete waste of time!
I didn't even bother to read the second word!!
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Anonymous07/12/13
Quite a nice little peak into a romantic couples serving
of desert more vouples should steam some thong
by
Anonymous07/13/13
Not the best.
This is clearly written for a man to enjoy, despite the fact that more women than men prefer reading erotic fiction. Perhaps you had fun writing it, but it won't work for every audience.
by
Anonymous07/14/13
Too bad the last commentor stopped reading
If he had continued he might have liked it. I did.
English
Total turn off!!
The very first word - "You" - is, to me, a signal that the story will be totally unbelievable and therefore complete rubbish!
I KNOW that I was not a participant and so that destroys any semblance or possibility of believability, without which the story is a complete waste of time!
I didn't even bother to read the second word!!
Quite a nice little peak into a romantic couples serving
of desert more vouples should steam some thong
Not the best.
This is clearly written for a man to enjoy, despite the fact that more women than men prefer reading erotic fiction. Perhaps you had fun writing it, but it won't work for every audience.
Too bad the last commentor stopped reading
If he had continued he might have liked it. I did.
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