After all they did read your story. If they really did not like then they should have found something they did like.
I enjoyed your story however fast paced it was. I prefer longer stories that have a relatively slow paced that examine how the person feels more than anything else.
Could you possibly slow down the pace of your story please.
Sweetie marries a guy who will NOT let her go down on him??? And she didn't know that before the wedding? It sounds like she married a Dad for her daughter, not a Hubby for herself! Bad enough, but it also sounds like (apparently not important enough for Sweetie - it is HER PoV the author uses - to actually tell her readers) Hubby and Sweetie have NOT discussed their areas of agreement and of disagreement in matters amorous! But Sweetie has solved that by seeking her own amorous satisfaction. Hubby will presumably be permitted to continue to feed, house and clothe Sweetie and her daughter!
"The ONLY problem..." Granted, that may well mean 'only sexual problem...'! They had been on the financial brink for three years, and were NOT yet out due to her new, better-paying job. Without Hubby's continuing support, they might have been a little better than the previous three years, but certainly not luxury!
My issue is that with 'no other sexual problems' Sweetie was so ready to flirt with the first polite and good-smelling guy that showed up! Granting (once again) that Sweetie is also clear that her sex life with current Hubby has NO more fireworks than her previous experiences with the father of her daughter! If that is intended to explain why Sweetie was so willing, maybe even eager, to put herself into a 'laundry loss' situation, then it falls pretty short! Easier to simply say 'Hey, Sweetie really likes strange dick whenever she can get it!' Then it becomes easy to also add "and she's entitled to as much dick as she can fit in, since her Hubby only rates 'fair but boring' in the rack!"
I guess I could have done a better job of explaining her feelings and getting into some of the things that led to her desire. I meant to leave things open to the imagination based off of some implications. I agree that it doesn't spell out her frustrations with Hubby not handling his duties as a man and being sexually conservative, where she wants to explore her natural ambitions.
a cheating piece of garbage is a cheating piece of garbage. she was not satisfied with him then cut him lose so he can find someone who wants him you whore.
English
Crap
Chating skank crap.
Damn
Cheating skank crap.
sorry
Dont be put off by the commentor
After all they did read your story. If they really did not like then they should have found something they did like.
I enjoyed your story however fast paced it was. I prefer longer stories that have a relatively slow paced that examine how the person feels more than anything else.
Could you possibly slow down the pace of your story please.
Thanks,
John
Well, that was quick
Sweetie marries a guy who will NOT let her go down on him??? And she didn't know that before the wedding? It sounds like she married a Dad for her daughter, not a Hubby for herself! Bad enough, but it also sounds like (apparently not important enough for Sweetie - it is HER PoV the author uses - to actually tell her readers) Hubby and Sweetie have NOT discussed their areas of agreement and of disagreement in matters amorous! But Sweetie has solved that by seeking her own amorous satisfaction. Hubby will presumably be permitted to continue to feed, house and clothe Sweetie and her daughter!
Lickidee
She had just got a job that pays more than his. He hasn't exactly been a great provider as they currently live with his parents.
Thank You very much for the feedback :)
TIron
"The ONLY problem..." Granted, that may well mean 'only sexual problem...'! They had been on the financial brink for three years, and were NOT yet out due to her new, better-paying job. Without Hubby's continuing support, they might have been a little better than the previous three years, but certainly not luxury!
My issue is that with 'no other sexual problems' Sweetie was so ready to flirt with the first polite and good-smelling guy that showed up! Granting (once again) that Sweetie is also clear that her sex life with current Hubby has NO more fireworks than her previous experiences with the father of her daughter! If that is intended to explain why Sweetie was so willing, maybe even eager, to put herself into a 'laundry loss' situation, then it falls pretty short! Easier to simply say 'Hey, Sweetie really likes strange dick whenever she can get it!' Then it becomes easy to also add "and she's entitled to as much dick as she can fit in, since her Hubby only rates 'fair but boring' in the rack!"
Lickidee
I guess I could have done a better job of explaining her feelings and getting into some of the things that led to her desire. I meant to leave things open to the imagination based off of some implications. I agree that it doesn't spell out her frustrations with Hubby not handling his duties as a man and being sexually conservative, where she wants to explore her natural ambitions.
a cheating piece of garbage is a cheating piece of garbage. she was not satisfied with him then cut him lose so he can find someone who wants him you whore.
Just a story about a slut that has no regard for her husband.
Story sucks!
Waste of time!
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