Haven't we all wondered what explanation Manet would have had for the scene?
I have always assumed that the second woman also belonged to the party, washing before or after, never noticed the boat. Maybe they all came by the boat to a "safely" secluded spot - except for you and the artist.
I am truly impressed. This is extremely well written.
Most impressed by your variations on a masterpiece. I too have wondered what on earth he was trying to say when he displayed those comely ladies.
was all I could say. What did she expect? After all, she was the one sitting naked in the grass.
Great story about how it might have been.
I liked it but would have preferred more dialogue between those he was watching. Why was she the only one nude? It might be interesting to explore how they came to be in the situation pictured.
I don't use this word to describe erotica much, but this story was absolutely adorable. I'm an art buff myself, so I appreciate this especially. This idea was simply inspired! I can't stop laughing. It's all so cute, and lurid and sexy, but, more than anything, cute! It's, another word I barely use, raunchy but the cleverness and the, I don't know, originality of it.
Was this for a contest? If not, how wonderfully unusual. Even if it was, damn clever. :)
Skilfully done with the voyeur replacing the position of painter Manet. Like also that the dandies discuss opera before getting down to business with their naked companion. All so refined!
While I enjoy some of Manet's paintings, I prefer Monet. But this has to be one of the most interesting takes on this rather famous painting that I've EVER read. Ever. No,I mean really, EVER! Connecting one of the most discussed and dissected paintings in Art History and somehow turning it into a porn story has to be considered some type of achievement (the ramblings of a dirty mind, I suspect). I didn't really like the story, but it was good for a laugh. Not what Manet had in mind, but then who really knows what he had in mind? Too late to ask him. Perhaps write a story where you can time travel back to Paris when he was alive and question him as to his motivations? Oh well. Thanks for the laugh.
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