by starkie10
I've read some strange tales but this has to the the strangest. Hopefully ch. 2 will give it some meaning as there isn't any as of yet.
Carry on.
BYL can say whatever he wants-but you can get your ass here so i can shove this broomstick up.
PLEASE! No chapter 2, no more writing, no more story.
Just go away and shoot yourself as quietly as possible.
Meanwhile, see a doctor on the off-hand chance something can be done to help you.
On the first installment he was a wimp.
Shaping up to be like 1000 other stories, "We went on vacation she fuck her way though the male population of the area, I wacked my 3" dick"
Maybe by some chance the author will redeem the story.
Because you lack even the basic knowledge of female anatomy. Way to go, ruining the plot by writing.
This wasn't even decently proofed. Please, no more swill...
1) Commas are NOT periods. Please study up on the proper use of punctuation.
2) If this is only the first chapter, then the title should say so. (I've gotten burned on this)
3) Since this does appear to be a multi-part story, I won't comment on the story just yet.
Needs better writing and proofing but I can see a very erotic story here IF you don't turn the husband into a wimp. If he uses the small pot to enlarge his cock and makes his wife into his loving monogamous slut this could finish up as a great story. Time will tell.
Word of advice: Don't. At least, don't until you learn how to write an decent sentence.
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Also, as another stated, warn people when you are not posting a complete story. After years of this shit, I decided that every story that every time this happens, the story gets a rating of 1.
It is only a story you bunch of fucking A-HOLES. The story police are out in a gaggle of shit heads.
I was hoping that slave the old woman rubbed on his wife's tits would make his cock a lot bigger too.
His wife is going to need a lot of fucking now.
I'll be watching for the next chapter.
Thanks for the read
Where this is headed. My guess is he ends up helping her find partners to satisfy her needs, then falls in love with licking up cream pies and waiting hand and foot on her bulls.
More like NonConsent and a LOT MORE like Fantasy/SciFi what with a Magic Potion!
The 'writing mechanics' are very lacking. Sentence structure and grammar kinda lead the 'walk of shame!'
The reader does NOT know if this magic or poison is permanent...if not (since the crone gave him some 'booster shots') or, if not, what is the duration of the effects is!
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What a bunch of crap!!! You like to see your wife get fucked by strangers?? You know how people are called they like that? IDIOTS!!!